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Question: Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular ...

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One of the important arguments among environmentalismenvironmentalists is worring for lossingworrying about the loss of particular species of plants and animals at this time. Althogh,Although it is one of the greatest aspects of environmental problems, in my opinion some other issuseissues are as mainsignificant as lossing especial especieslosing specific species. From an overall perspective, the growth ofin the number of people, causes the over usage overuse of environmental soursesresources, while hunting and cultivating some kinds of species certain species have increased drastically recently. Indeed, the environment not to be able is unable to foster again rapidllyrecover rapidly. UltimatellyUltimately, the balance between consumingconsumption and applyingrenewal is damaged. AdditionalyAdditionally, some unique kindkinds of animals were hunted, it is because collectors pay extra money for them. For instance, Hindian tigger hase been extincted, resulting in hunting for the Indian tiger has gone extinct due to years and enhancedof hunting, which increased local people's incomes. However, itwhile this is a popular idea these daydays, in my opinion, over-pollution polluted is simultaneously realy dangeriousvery dangerous for plants and animals at this time. Litter are expandedis scattered in the suburbs and forestforests, and smog offrom factories and cars is emissionedemitted due to burnburning coal in developing countries. Not only do we use the consume vast amounts of vegetables and meet ofmeat from animals, but we also desrtoyeddestroy their habitats. Furthermore, Peoplepeople should be much more concernconcerned about the side-effect effects of their treatsactions. For example, after rised air pollution rose in tehranTehran, 80% of local birds are migrated and never returnd returned. In conclusion, my firm belifbelief is, that while the loss of particular species of plants and animals is an important topic at this time, overpllutionover-pollution and over consumption is overconsumption are as important as other topicsissues and aslo intense lossingalso contribute to the diverceintense loss of species diversity in the world.
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One of the important arguments among environmentalism is worring for lossing of particular species of plants and animals this time. Althogh, it is one of the greatest aspects of environmental problems, in my opinion some other issuse are as main as lossing especial especies.
One of the key debates in environmentalism concerns the worrying loss of particular plant and animal species today. Although this is indeed a significant environmental issue, in my opinion, other problems are equally as important as the loss of specific species.
From an overall perspective, the growth of number of people, causes the over usage of environmental sourses, hunting and cultivating some kinds of species increased drastically recently. Indeed, environment not to be able to foster again rapidlly. Ultimatelly the balance between consuming and applying is damaged. Additionaly, some unique kind of animals were hunted, it is because collectors pay extra money for them. For instance, Hindian tigger hase been extincted, resulting in hunting for years and enhanced local people incomes.
From an overall perspective, population growth has led to the overuse of natural resources, while hunting and farming of certain species have increased dramatically in recent years. As a result, the environment cannot recover quickly enough, ultimately disrupting the balance between consumption and regeneration. Additionally, some rare animals have been hunted excessively due to the high prices collectors are willing to pay. For example, the Indian tiger has become extinct after years of hunting, which was driven by the financial incentives for local communities.
However, it is a popular idea these day, in my opinion over polluted is simultaneously realy dangerious for plants and animals this time. Litter are expanded in the suburbs and forest, smog of factories and cars is emissioned due to burn coal in developing countries. Not only we use the vast amounts of vegetables and meet of animals but also desrtoyed their habitats. Furthermore, People should be much more concern about side-effect of their treats. For example, after rised air pollution in tehran 80 % of local birds are migrated and never returnd .
However, while species loss is a widely discussed issue today, I believe that pollution is equally dangerous for both plants and animals. Waste is accumulating in suburban and forest areas, while smog from factories and vehicles continues to be emitted due to coal burning in developing countries. Not only do we consume vast amounts of plant and animal products, but we also destroy their natural habitats. People should be far more concerned about the side effects of their actions. For instance, after air pollution levels rose in Tehran, 80% of local birds migrated and never returned.
In conclusion, my firm belif is, while the loss of particular species of plants and animals is an important topic this time, overpllution and over consumption is as important as other topics and aslo intense lossing the diverce of species in the world.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that while the loss of specific species is an important issue today, overpollution and overconsumption are just as critical and contribute significantly to the decline of biodiversity worldwide.
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Task Achievement

  • Your essay addresses both views and provides your opinion, which meets the task requirements. However, the argument could be clearer and more developed.
  • Some points are not fully explained (e.g., "over usage of environmental sourses" needs more detail).
  • Examples (e.g., Indian tiger, Tehran’s pollution) are relevant but could be more precise (e.g., "Hindian tigger" should be "Indian tiger," and "tehran" should be "Tehran").
  • The conclusion restates your opinion but could summarize the discussion more effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion

  • The essay has a logical structure (introduction, body paragraphs, conclusion), but some ideas are not smoothly connected.
  • Transition words ("However," "Furthermore," "For instance") are used, but some sentences are awkwardly phrased, making the flow less natural.
  • Paragraphing is mostly correct, but some sentences could be combined for better clarity (e.g., "Additionaly, some unique kind of animals were hunted, it is because collectors pay extra money for them" could be reworded for smoother flow).

Lexical Resource

  • There are several spelling and word choice errors (e.g., "lossing" → "losing," "especial especies" → "specific species," "overpllution" → "over-pollution").
  • Some vocabulary is repetitive (e.g., "this time" is overused; alternatives like "currently" or "today" could be used).
  • A few awkward phrases ("environment not to be able to foster again rapidlly" → "the environment cannot recover quickly").

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

  • There are frequent grammatical errors:
    • Subject-verb agreement ("the growth of number of people, causes" → "the growth in the number of people causes").
    • Incorrect verb forms ("hase been extincted" → "has gone extinct").
    • Missing articles ("in developing countries" is correct, but "burn coal" should be "burning coal").
    • Sentence fragments ("Indeed, environment not to be able to foster again rapidlly" is incomplete).
  • More complex sentence structures (e.g., conditional or passive voice) could improve variety.

Suggestions for Improvement

  1. Proofread for grammar and spelling – Use tools like Grammarly or ask a native speaker to check.
  2. Clarify and expand ideas – Some arguments need more explanation (e.g., how overconsumption affects species loss).
  3. Improve transitions – Ensure each sentence flows logically into the next.
  4. Use more precise vocabulary – Avoid repetition and choose accurate terms (e.g., "biodiversity loss" instead of "lossing the diverce of species").

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