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Question: Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular ...

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Many individuals argue that the most urgent environmental issue of our time is the loss of specific animal and plantsplant species. OtherOthers believe there are more critical environmental issues, including climate change. Personally, I believe protecting particular animal and plant species should be considered a more urgent issue. Those who argue that the loss of particular species of plants and animals is our main environmental problem believe it can have a negative lonlong-term impact on humanhumans. Humans rely heavily on plants and animals for their survival. Human provideWe obtain our food from natural resources and animals. Each species of animalsanimal and plantsplant plays a crucial role in the food chain. For instance, bees are an essential part of the food chain dutdue to pollination,; if they becombecome extinct, the whole ecosystem will be distruptdisrupted. Therefore, the extinction of specific animal or plant species can threatthreaten human life. Others believe we should focus on more serious environmental problems, including climate change or air and water pollution. These problems have already have threatend threatened our lifelives and earththe Earth, as they damage the environment in irreversibelan irreversible manner. They lead to rising water levels, damaging and damage the ozone layer. They asloalso harm human health by makingpolluting the air and soil polluted, which not only decreasedecreases the qaulityquality of likelife but also causecauses long-term negative effects on our health. However, we can tackle these issueissues and simulantelysimultaneously consider the loss of particular species of animals or plants. In conclusion, although environmental problems, including climate change and air pollution, require immediate actionsaction, we must protect rare animal or plant species to avoid extinction.
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Overall Band Score
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Overview
Vocabulary Range
average
Linking Words
weak
Spelling
weak
Grammar Accuracy
average
Grammar Range
average
Cohesion
average
Paragraph Structure
average
Task Response
strong
Word Count
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Task Achievement

  • Your essay addresses both views and provides a clear opinion, which meets the task requirements. However, the argument could be more balanced. The second view (climate change and pollution) is somewhat underdeveloped compared to the first view (loss of species).
  • Some points lack clarity due to grammatical errors (e.g., "negative lon-term impact," "if they becom extinct," "irreversibel manner"). These affect the coherence of your argument.
  • The conclusion is present but could be more nuanced—acknowledging the importance of both issues while reinforcing your stance.

Coherence and Cohesion

  • The essay has a logical structure, but some transitions between ideas are abrupt. For example, the shift from discussing species loss to climate change could be smoother.
  • Repetition occurs in some places (e.g., "animal and plants species" is mentioned multiple times without variation).
  • Some sentences are awkwardly phrased, making the flow less natural (e.g., "Human provide our food from natural resources and animals").

Lexical Resource

  • There are several spelling and word choice errors ("dut" instead of "due," "qaulity of like" instead of "quality of life," "simulantely" instead of "simultaneously"). These reduce clarity.
  • Some vocabulary is repetitive (e.g., "particular species" is used frequently). More varied synonyms (e.g., "endangered wildlife," "biodiversity loss") would improve lexical range.
  • Some phrases are unnatural (e.g., "damaging ozone layer" should be "damage to the ozone layer").

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

  • There are multiple grammatical errors:
    • Subject-verb agreement issues ("Human provide" → "Humans provide").
    • Incorrect verb forms ("if they becom extinct" → "if they become extinct").
    • Missing articles ("damaging ozone layer" → "damaging the ozone layer").
    • Sentence fragments ("They aslo harm human health by making air and soil polluted, which not only decrease the qaulity of like but also cause long-term negative effects on our health.")
  • More complex sentence structures (e.g., conditional sentences, relative clauses) would improve the grammatical range.

Suggestions for Improvement

  1. Balance the Discussion – Give equal depth to both views before stating your opinion.
  2. Proofread for Errors – Correct spelling, grammar, and word choice to improve clarity.
  3. Use Synonyms & Varied Structures – Avoid repetition and include more complex sentences.
  4. Strengthen the Conclusion – Summarize both sides more clearly before reinforcing your stance.

With these adjustments, your essay will be more coherent, accurate, and persuasive. Keep practicing!