Question: In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in...
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Advertising role is not conceal to everyone and undoubtedly this new phenamenon could have important play in temporary life. Big and small busnisses are introduced by ads and their productions can be valuated and regard new. Although this type of informatiom can change market cricles ,there are positive and negative impact that can have important role in economic system. Finally, seling period and financial benefit is the end aim of producing and every producer try for sucsessing at this stage and adding a new thing to its procuction ,can be the best way for better selling. For example , when the first pen and pencil wad made,there was not any rival who product the others and for some year the first company was pioneer ,but after years the other persons decided to establish new factories for estationary anf for better selling they had to force have volenteer and they created some different colours to the first pencil. Or the other companey had to add various tastes to proteen products and something eles, Infact this kind of comparison that is born after industrial revolution, have generated variety of production and individual can ascess their desiers and advertising play a vital and crutial play in bazars that could lead reducing emploees, increasing job and salaries, improvement at production system, saving many and time for distinguish best and needable product that all of the are the positives about advertisng. On the other hand,advertising emphasis on being new of manufaction can have negative impact on people life. However suitable ,this type of mention, will raise consumeriseing between contries and humanity life woll be in danger, Because factories have to strugle with their components and however creative they have to manufactor new thins for ever and this will convert to circle. Need to more enery for progressing new and marketable product and conciving individual about them can be dangerous for our planet.in conclusion, by regarding to negative and positive side of advertising ,this is people undertaking to have independant deciding for buy and sell and advertismen can have just an introducer function in industry and market.
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Advertising role is not conceal to everyone and undoubtedly this new phenamenon could have important play in temporary life. Big and small busnisses are introduced by ads and their productions can be valuated and regard new. Although this type of informatiom can change market cricles ,there are positive and negative impact that can have important role in economic system. Finally, seling period and financial benefit is the end aim of producing and every producer try for sucsessing at this stage and adding a new thing to its procuction ,can be the best way for better selling. For example , when the first pen and pencil wad made,there was not any rival who product the others and for some year the first company was pioneer ,but after years the other persons decided to establish new factories for estationary anf for better selling they had to force have volenteer and they created some different colours to the first pencil. Or the other companey had to add various tastes to proteen products and something eles, Infact this kind of comparison that is born after industrial revolution, have generated variety of production and individual can ascess their desiers and advertising play a vital and crutial play in bazars that could lead reducing emploees, increasing job and salaries, improvement at production system, saving many and time for distinguish best and needable product that all of the are the positives about advertisng. On the other hand,advertising emphasis on being new of manufaction can have negative impact on people life. However suitable ,this type of mention, will raise consumeriseing between contries and humanity life woll be in danger, Because factories have to strugle with their components and however creative they have to manufactor new thins for ever and this will convert to circle. Need to more enery for progressing new and marketable product and conciving individual about them can be dangerous for our planet.in conclusion, by regarding to negative and positive side of advertising ,this is people undertaking to have independant deciding for buy and sell and advertismen can have just an introducer function in industry and market.