Question: In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to re...
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In current life, everything has changeschanged and because of technology, the individual’s tendensytendency to paper bookbooks and newspaper havenewspapers has converted to online and people prefer to gain information and newnews without any paying and there is no need for printing and paying.
In my opinion, this type ifof being and getting data without money is not true and in this essay iI will argue about my agreeagreement and disagreement.
From the first paper newspaper until now, almost everything havehas changed and there is not anything nothinglike the past and we can sayhuman's life is divided tointo before Internet and social media and the past. AtIn the beginingbeginning years of the newspapers and radio's birth, anybody were not nobody wasable to imagine that one day online newspaper separatednewspapers would spread across the wordworld and with gustjust some click clicks, you can obtain approximatelyalmost all information about anything.
Although the Internet and other online broadcastbroadcasts have changed anythingeverything, this type of media needs to continue and without paying monthmonthly payments these bureaubureaus cannot able to survive. For example, Google Company with milionmillions of staff havehas lots of financial problems, management costs, and introduse programintroduces programs and developerdevelopers and something elseother things that whit out withoutselling informationit is not able to pay anyanything.
On the other hand, without any money, paying money will help news broadcastbroadcasts to increase and update information and without money impulsefinancial incentive most journalistjournalists prefer not to do not work stronglyhard and these leadthis leads to reducing ofa reduction in news validity.MariginallyMarginally I should say today in the new world that gaining news and information is not because of books and information and advertisement have had hascreated a new life and world, there are still people who prefer reading paper, specially especially books, and want and are ready to pay money for this type of media.
However, i saidI mentioned disadvantages aboutfree reading ibut I can say that most theseof this kind of being free ishas helped to rise readersincrease the number of readers and advertisement and selling workshops and somethingthings like these during free news and bookbooks have attracted milionmillions of readers around the world.
In conclusion, iI can say for decidingmaking a strong desissiondecision about being free or not about books and newspapernewspapers and printed or online acsessaccess, we need to assess lot thing they attend to many things and considerall sightaspects of them.
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Here is feedback on your essay based on IELTS writing criteria:
Task Achievement
Clarity of Position: Your stance is somewhat unclear. While you mention both agreement and disagreement, the argument lacks a strong, consistent position. A clearer thesis statement would help.
Development of Ideas: Some points are underdeveloped or repetitive (e.g., financial challenges of free news). More specific examples and deeper analysis would strengthen your argument.
Relevance: Some sentences are off-topic (e.g., Google’s financial issues are not directly tied to newspapers/books). Stay focused on the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion
Logical Flow: The essay lacks smooth transitions between ideas. Some sentences feel disconnected (e.g., sudden shifts between free news and Google’s finances). Use linking words (however, furthermore, on the contrary) to improve flow.
Paragraphing: The structure is unclear. Separate paragraphs should focus on distinct points (e.g., one for advantages of free online content, another for drawbacks).
Repetition: Some ideas are repeated (e.g., financial struggles of media companies) without adding new insights.
Lexical Resource
Word Choice: Some words are incorrect or awkward (tendensy → tendency, gust → just, desission → decision). Use a dictionary or spell-check to avoid errors.
Vocabulary Range: Limited use of topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., digitalization, subscription models, environmental impact of print media). Expand your lexical range.
Sentence Structure: Many sentences are grammatically incorrect or unclear (e.g., "this type if being and getting data without money is not true"). Simplify and proofread.
Verb Tenses: Inconsistent use (have changes → has changed, were not able → would not be able). Stick to appropriate tenses.
Articles/Prepositions: Missing or misused ("the individual’s tendensy" → individuals’ tendency, "without money impulse" → without financial motivation).
Suggestions for Improvement
Thesis Statement: Clearly state your position in the introduction (e.g., "While online content is growing, printed media will not disappear entirely due to [reasons].").
Paragraph Structure:
Paragraph 1: Benefits of free online content (convenience, cost).