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Question: In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. W...

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In certain nations, owning a home instead of renting is deemed a matter of significant importance for individuals. Were I to express my opinion, I would say the same is true in my country, mainly because of the drop in the value of our currency. Moreover, in my opinion, the need to allocate time for paying rent and the stress caused by monthly rental paymentpayments can be overwhelming, whereas homeowners do not face such issues. To begin with, I must say in countries like mine, the Islamic republicRepublic of Iran, the value of the currency decreases every day, making it impossible to purchase high-priced assets like houses. As a result, if someone has a fixed amount of money, they might be able to purchase a home with it this year; next year, however, they may not even be able to afford a car with the same amount. Thus, renting a home is just a temporary cure, and after some years, paying rent will surely be impossible. Furthermore, renting a house requires a monthly considerable amount of funds monthly, which can sometimes be a quite high. Not only do you need to make sure that you pay it on time, but you also face the constant stress of wondering whether you will make it or not. My mother, for instance, is a homeowner and she is used to savesaving money monthly, and purchasepurchasing gold to keeppreserve her savings' value, and by the end of the year, convertconverting the gold into a property. As a result, she has no stress about her wealth; my aunt, on the other hand, lives in a rentingrented home, and always has anxiety thinking about the next month's rental payment, and I cannot remember her being relaxed at all. Therefore, it can be concluded that in certain countries, whichwhere the currency’s value lessenlessens daily, renting a home does not seem reasonable, and will merely add to existing concerns of life.
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In certain nations, owning a home instead of renting is deemed a matter of significant importance for individuals. Were I to express my opinion, I would say the same is true in my country, mainly because of the drop in the value of our currency. Moreover, in my opinion, the need to allocate time for paying rent and the stress caused by monthly rental payment can be overwhelming, whereas homeowners do not face such issues.
In certain nations, owning a home rather than renting is considered highly important for individuals. If I were to express my opinion, I would argue that this holds true in my country, primarily due to the depreciation of our currency. Furthermore, in my view, the time and stress associated with monthly rental payments can be overwhelming, whereas homeowners are spared such burdens.
To begin with, I must say in countries like mine, Islamic republic of Iran, the value of currency decreases every day, making it impossible to purchase high-priced assets like houses. As a result, if someone has a fixed amount of money, they might be able to purchase home with it this year; next year, however, they may not even be able to afford a car with the same amount. Thus, renting home is just a temporary cure, and after some years, paying rent will surely be impossible.
To begin with, in countries like mine—the Islamic Republic of Iran—the currency loses value daily, making it increasingly difficult to purchase high-value assets such as property. Consequently, if someone has a fixed sum of money, they might afford a home this year, yet the same amount may not suffice for even a car the following year. Thus, renting is merely a temporary solution, and over time, sustaining rental payments may become unfeasible.
Furthermore, renting a house requires a monthly considerable amount of funds, which can sometimes be a quite high. Not only do you need to make sure that you pay it on time, but you also face the constant stress wondering whether you will make it or not. My mother, for instance, is a homeowner and she is used to save money monthly, and purchase gold to keep her savings value, and by the end of the year, convert the gold into a property. As a result, she has no stress about her wealth; my aunt, on the other hand, lives in a renting home, and always has anxiety thinking about the next month rental payment, and I cannot remember her being relaxed at all.
Moreover, renting requires a substantial monthly financial commitment, which can often be excessively high. Not only must tenants ensure timely payments, but they also endure persistent anxiety over whether they will manage to do so. For example, my mother, a homeowner, saves money monthly, invests in gold to preserve her savings' value, and eventually converts it into property. As a result, she remains financially secure. In contrast, my aunt, who rents, constantly worries about the next month’s payment, and I have never seen her free from this stress.
Therefore, it can be concluded that in certain countries, which the currency’s value lessen daily, renting home does not seem reasonable, and will merely add to existing concerns of life.
In conclusion, in countries where currency devalues rapidly, renting is not a sensible long-term option and only compounds life’s existing pressures.
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Task Achievement

  • Your essay addresses the prompt effectively, discussing why homeownership is important in some countries and providing a clear opinion on whether this is positive or negative.
  • The examples from your personal experience (Iran’s currency devaluation, your mother and aunt’s situations) strengthen your argument.
  • However, the conclusion could be more balanced. While you argue that renting is stressful, you might briefly acknowledge potential benefits of renting (e.g., flexibility, lower initial costs) to present a more nuanced view.

Coherence and Cohesion

  • The essay is logically structured, with clear paragraphs for each main idea.
  • Some transitions could be smoother. For example, "To begin with, I must say" could be more concise ("In countries like Iran, for example...").
  • The conclusion restates your position well but could better summarize the key points from the body paragraphs.

Lexical Resource

  • You use a good range of vocabulary (e.g., "deemed significant," "overwhelming," "considerable amount of funds").
  • Some phrases are slightly awkward or repetitive ("Were I to express my opinion" → "In my opinion"; "renting home" → "renting a home").
  • Be careful with word choice: "lessen" should be "declines" or "decreases" in the conclusion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

  • There are minor grammatical errors:
    • "Were I to express my opinion" is overly formal; a simpler structure ("In my opinion") would work better.
    • "Renting home" should be "renting a home" (article missing).
    • "She is used to save money" → "She is used to saving money."
    • "Which the currency’s value lessen daily" → "where the currency’s value declines daily."
  • Sentence structures are mostly correct, but some could be more varied (e.g., avoid starting multiple sentences with "Furthermore" or "Thus").

Suggestions for Improvement

  1. Balance the argument: Briefly acknowledge potential advantages of renting to make the analysis more objective.
  2. Refine grammar and word choice: Pay attention to articles ("a home") and verb forms ("saving" instead of "save").
  3. Improve transitions: Use a wider variety of linking words to enhance flow.
  4. Strengthen the conclusion: Summarize key points more clearly and avoid repetition.

Overall, your essay presents a strong argument with relevant examples. With minor refinements in grammar, vocabulary, and structure, it could be even more effective. Keep practicing!