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Question: In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to re...

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It is sometimes argued that in the far future newspapers and books will disappear. Due to advancements in technology, news and books will be published online and with nowithout the need for payment, so they will be more accessible to people. While I agree that books and newspapers would be significantly affected in the future, I believe that there are individuals who will continue to buy paper books or newspapers, and even pay for them. On the one hand, the effects of technological developments are undeniable, particularly on books and newspapers. First of all, with a considerable range of platforms in the worldworldwide, there is competition between local and national press to attract their customers, so the newestlatest news will be published quickly and will be available and free on many platforms, even on social media, like Instagram. In addition, as more people become aware of the detrimental effecteffects of printing paper, which causes deforestation, they are less willing to buy these and prefer more e-books or readreading news online. Therefore, these traditional waysmethods will lose their attractionappeal. On the other hand, despite the above arguments, I believe that some people are goingwill continue to use paper-based news or books in the future. By increasing the speed of publishing news, there are potential disadvantages. Firstly, the quality of news willmay decrease; and secondly, the yellow press might publish false news to increase their income. As a result, individuals will buy newsnewspapers to ensure that the publisher does not make any mistakes for its profit. Moreover, there are a number of people who struggle with the physical conditions, medical problems, or not being familiar unfamiliarity with technology, so they will buy paper books or newsnewspapers. For example, the older generation or disabled people who are not being able unable to go out will have to buy books, or people who have eye problems would continue to use traditional methods. In conclusion, in the wake of technology, paper books and newspapernewspapers may be forgotten, because in the future everything will be free and available. Although I agree that technology has a vital impact on books and newspapers, in my opinion, in the future some people, such as the elderly, will still buy newsnewspapers or prefer to read paper books.
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It is sometimes argued that in the far future newspapers and books will disappear. Due to advancements in technology, news and books will be published online and with no need for payment, so they will be more accessible to people. While I agree that books and newspapers would be significantly affected in the future, I believe that there are individuals who will continue to buy paper books or newspapers, and even pay for them.
It is sometimes argued that in the distant future, newspapers and books will become obsolete. Due to technological advancements, news and books will be published online, often free of charge, making them more accessible. While I agree that books and newspapers will be significantly affected, I believe some individuals will continue to purchase and even pay for printed versions.
On the one hand, the effects of technological developments are undeniable, particularly on books and newspapers. First of all, with a considerable range of platforms in the world, there is competition between local and national press to attract their customers, so the newest news will be published quickly and will be available and free on many platforms, even on social media, like Instagram. In addition, as more people become aware of the detrimental effect of printing paper, which causes deforestation, they are less willing to buy these and prefer more e-books or read news online. Therefore, these traditional ways will lose their attraction.
On the one hand, the impact of technological progress on books and newspapers is undeniable. With numerous digital platforms available, there is intense competition among publishers to attract readers, leading to faster, free access to news on websites and social media platforms like Instagram. Additionally, growing awareness of deforestation caused by paper production has made many people prefer e-books and online news, reducing the appeal of traditional formats.
On the other hand, despite the above arguments, I believe that some people are going to use paper-based news or books in the future. By increasing the speed of publishing news, there are potential disadvantages. Firstly, the quality of news will decrease; and secondly, the yellow press might publish false news to increase their income. As a result, individuals will buy news to ensure that the publisher does not make any mistakes for its profit. Moreover, there are a number of people who struggle with the physical conditions, medical problems or not being familiar with technology, so they will buy paper books or news. For example, the older generation or disabled people who are not being able to go out will have to buy books, or people who have eye problems would continue to use traditional methods.
On the other hand, I believe printed books and newspapers will still have a place in the future. The rapid dissemination of online news has drawbacks, such as declining quality and the spread of misinformation by unreliable sources. Consequently, some readers may prefer paid, reputable newspapers to ensure accuracy. Furthermore, certain groups, such as the elderly, individuals with visual impairments, or those unfamiliar with technology, may continue to rely on printed materials for accessibility and comfort.
In conclusion, in the wake of technology, paper books and newspaper may be forgotten, because in the future everything will be free and available. Although I agree that technology has a vital impact on books and newspapers, in my opinion in the future some people, such as the elderly, will still buy news or prefer to read paper books.
In conclusion, while technology may diminish the prevalence of printed books and newspapers, they are unlikely to disappear entirely. Despite the convenience of digital media, some people will still value and purchase physical copies for reliability, accessibility, or personal preference.
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Overall Band Score
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strong
Linking Words
strong
Spelling
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Grammar Accuracy
strong
Grammar Range
strong
Cohesion
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Paragraph Structure
strong
Task Response
strong
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Task Achievement

  • Strengths:

    • Your essay presents a clear position (partial agreement) and develops arguments for both sides of the issue.
    • You provide relevant examples (e.g., environmental concerns, older generations, disabled individuals) to support your points.
    • The response exceeds the minimum word count, ensuring a thorough discussion.

  • Areas for Improvement:

    • The introduction could be more concise. The first sentence is somewhat repetitive ("in the far future newspapers and books will disappear" vs. "nobody will buy printed newspapers or books").
    • Some points could be more developed. For example, the argument about "yellow press" publishing false news is interesting but could be expanded with a clearer link to why printed news would be more reliable.
    • The conclusion restates the thesis but could summarize the key arguments more effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion

  • Strengths:

    • The essay is logically structured with clear paragraphs (introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion).
    • Transition words ("On the one hand," "On the other hand," "In conclusion") help guide the reader.

  • Areas for Improvement:

    • Some sentences could be more smoothly connected. For example, the shift from discussing environmental concerns to competition in news platforms feels abrupt.
    • The phrase "By increasing the speed of publishing news, there are potential disadvantages" is unclear—consider rewording for better flow.

Lexical Resource

  • Strengths:

    • You use a good range of vocabulary (e.g., "detrimental effect," "deforestation," "yellow press").
    • There are no major errors in word choice, and the language is mostly natural.

  • Areas for Improvement:

    • Some phrases could be more precise. For example, "physical conditions, medical problems or not being familiar with technology" could be reworded for clarity (e.g., "physical disabilities, medical conditions, or limited technological literacy").
    • Avoid redundancy: "paper books or newspapers" could simply be "printed materials" in some places.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

  • Strengths:

    • The essay demonstrates a variety of sentence structures (simple, compound, and complex).
    • Most grammar is accurate, and errors do not impede understanding.

  • Areas for Improvement:

    • Some minor grammatical issues:
      • "there is competition between local and national press to attract their customers" → "there is competition among local and national press outlets to attract readers."
      • "people who have eye problems would continue to use traditional methods" → "people with eye problems may prefer traditional methods."
    • Watch for subject-verb agreement: "the older generation or disabled people who are not being able to go out" → "older adults or disabled individuals who cannot go out."

Final Suggestions

  • Refine the introduction to be more concise and engaging.
  • Strengthen transitions between ideas for smoother flow.
  • Expand on key arguments (e.g., reliability of printed news) with more detail.
  • Proofread for minor grammatical and lexical improvements.

Overall, this is a well-structured and thoughtful response. With some refinements in clarity and precision, it could be even stronger. Keep practicing!