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Question: Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required ...

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In the modern world wshere the professionals work has becom widely issues.There are various perspective on ir necessity and effectiveness of working professionals in the county they have educations appose to working in different country.Some people believe that it is essencial for special indivisual to staying in own nation,While other believe it may not be great approach. Nevertheless,I firmly believe that whereever they want to live and work is more beneficial.
In the modern world, where professionals work has become a widely debated issue. There are various perspectives on the necessity and effectiveness of professionals working in the country where they received their education, as opposed to working abroad. Some people believe that it is essential for skilled individuals to remain in their home country, while others argue that this may not always be the best approach. Nevertheless, I firmly believe that professionals should have the freedom to choose where they live and work, as this is more beneficial.
There are several resons why some people argue that professionals should be purpuse the career in the country that they schooling. Fisrt and foremost,due to migrate these people the area confort to shortage of professionals and societies could not meet the needs of people. For example delevoped country may progress more and undeveloped country needs more to productive specialist that they leave the country. Additionally, Neglecting the importance of contibute these people resulted in public people no longer passionate about proceed the educationals.
There are several reasons why some argue that professionals should pursue careers in the country where they were educated. First and foremost, if skilled individuals emigrate, their home country may face a shortage of professionals, making it difficult to meet societal needs. For example, developed countries may continue to progress, while underdeveloped nations suffer from a lack of productive specialists who choose to leave. Additionally, if professionals neglect their responsibility to contribute to their home country, the public may lose motivation to pursue higher education.
On the other hand,I support the view that professionals can chose whenever they want, because not only they ettempt to achive success but also as a person they could desition to work or live for themselves. Furthermore, addresing these issues need to government tackle their problem and provide the great situation that their choice would be saty and work for people in the country they have education. Seldom government investing on proffecional persons, should policymakers meet the needs of indivisuals,they would cater for own peoples' societies.
On the other hand, I support the view that professionals should have the freedom to choose where they work, as they not only strive for personal success but also have the right to make decisions that benefit their own lives. Furthermore, governments should address the underlying issues that drive professionals to leave, such as improving working conditions and opportunities. If policymakers invest in skilled individuals and create an environment that meets their needs, professionals may be more inclined to stay and contribute to their home country’s development.
In conclusion, Although both views have merits, I argue that There is no mandatory to profesionals to work in where they training.
In conclusion, while both perspectives have merit, I argue that professionals should not be obligated to work in the country where they were trained. Personal choice and opportunities for growth should be prioritized.
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Overall Band Score
4
Overview
Vocabulary Range
average
Linking Words
weak
Spelling
weak
Grammar Accuracy
weak
Grammar Range
average
Cohesion
average
Paragraph Structure
average
Task Response
average
Word Count
sufficient
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Here is your feedback based on IELTS writing criteria:

Task Achievement

  • Clarity of Position: Your opinion is stated, but the introduction and conclusion are unclear due to grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. The thesis should be more precise.
  • Development of Ideas: Some arguments are presented (e.g., brain drain, personal choice), but they lack depth and coherence. Examples (e.g., developed vs. undeveloped countries) are mentioned but not well-explained.
  • Relevance: The response addresses the prompt but struggles with clarity, making some points difficult to follow.

Coherence and Cohesion

  • Logical Flow: The essay lacks smooth transitions between ideas. The second and third paragraphs present opposing views, but the connection between them is weak.
  • Paragraphing: The structure is somewhat followed, but sentences within paragraphs are not always logically connected.
  • Linking Words: Limited use of cohesive devices (e.g., "Furthermore," "Additionally")—some are misused or missing where needed.

Lexical Resource

  • Word Choice: Many words are misspelled or misused (e.g., "wshere," "purpuse," "ettempt," "desition"). This affects clarity.
  • Vocabulary Range: Some attempts at varied vocabulary (e.g., "brain drain," "policymakers") but errors reduce effectiveness.
  • Collocations & Idiomatic Use: Frequent unnatural phrasing (e.g., "public people no longer passionate about proceed the educationals").

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

  • Sentence Structure: Many sentences are grammatically incorrect or awkward (e.g., "There are various perspective on ir necessity and effectiveness of working professionals in the county they have educations").
  • Tense & Agreement Errors: Frequent subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., "professionals work has becom widely issues").
  • Punctuation & Articles: Missing or incorrect use of articles ("the county" vs. "their country"), and inconsistent punctuation.

Suggestions for Improvement

  1. Grammar & Clarity: Focus on correcting basic grammar (subject-verb agreement, word forms, sentence structure).
  2. Vocabulary: Use simpler, more accurate words if complex ones lead to errors.
  3. Organization: Clearly separate arguments with topic sentences and smoother transitions.
  4. Proofreading: Review for spelling and coherence before submitting.

Your essay meets the word count but needs significant improvement in clarity, grammar, and argument development to achieve a higher band score. Keep practicing with a focus on accuracy and coherence.