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The number of memebrmembers of the society who become interested in the history of the house or building they live in, has significantly increased over the past few decades. In this essay, I will discuss the possible reasons behind this phenomenon and give my own opinion.Firstly, Itit is vitallvital that we appreciate the importance of history. As the great impact of historical events on perevery age, more and more people are aware of such influences and they try to find out about the history behind different things, including the accommodation they live in. In my opinion, one of the significant reasons behind this trend, is the exponential impact of social media and movies like the counjoringThe Conjuring on the individualsindividual's mind. Furthermore, nowadays the number of movies with plotplots of hauntinghaunted houses are increasehas increased markedly a, and such movies have a great impact on people's mind minds. As a result, people find it interesting to develope a developresearch on this.Secondly and more importantly, though in order to contributing to thepopularity of this trend, is the various ways that people can use to noticelearn about the history of anything. A particularly fascinating example of this is social media. Moreover, the Internet has placed the entire world (and all of the information in it), including our house's history, at our fingertips. In earlier times, conducting research entailed long hours searching librraylibrary shelves. Now, however, the same information can be accssedaccessed at the click of a button.By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that the impact of social media along with accessabilityaccessibility to information makemakes people more curious to realizediscover the history of the houses or buildingbuildings they live in.
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Task Achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt by discussing reasons for the growing interest in house history and suggesting ways to research it. However, the response could be more balanced—your second body paragraph focuses more on research methods rather than additional reasons.
Some ideas are unclear or repetitive (e.g., the influence of movies is mentioned twice without much development).
The conclusion restates your position but does not summarize key points effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a logical structure (introduction, body paragraphs, conclusion), but transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Some sentences are awkwardly phrased, making the flow less natural (e.g., "The number of memebr of the society who become interested...").
The second body paragraph shifts abruptly from discussing reasons to research methods without clear linking.
Lexical Resource
There are several spelling and word choice errors (memebr, counjoring, accssed, increase markedly a).
Some phrases are unnatural ("It is vitall that we appreciate the importance of history").
Repetition of words like impact and social media reduces variety.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Multiple grammatical errors affect clarity:
Subject-verb agreement ("the number... has" is correct, but "the number of movies... are increase" is wrong).
Incorrect word forms ("find interesting to develope a research" → "find it interesting to research").
Missing articles ("the Internet has placed the entire world... including our house history").
Some sentences are overly complex and confusing ("As the great impact of historical events on per age").
Suggestions for Improvement
Clarify and Expand Ideas – Develop each reason (e.g., cultural heritage, personal curiosity) and research method (e.g., archives, local historians) in separate paragraphs.
Improve Grammar & Vocabulary – Proofread for errors and use more precise language (e.g., "haunted houses" instead of "haunting houses").
Strengthen Cohesion – Use linking words (Furthermore, Additionally, For instance) to connect ideas smoothly.
Refine Conclusion – Summarize key points rather than repeating the thesis.
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