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Question: In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the h...

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The number of memebrmembers of the society who become interested in the history of the house or building they live in, has significantly increased over the past few decades. In this essay, I will discuss the possible reasons behind this phenomenon and give my own opinion. Firstly, Itit is vitallvital that we appreciate the importance of history. As the great impact of historical events on perevery age, more and more people are aware of such influences and they try to find out about the history behind different things, including the accommodation they live in. In my opinion, one of the significant reasons behind this trend, is the exponential impact of social media and movies like the counjoringThe Conjuring on the individualsindividual's mind. Furthermore, nowadays the number of movies with plotplots of hauntinghaunted houses are increasehas increased markedly a, and such movies have a great impact on people's mind minds. As a result, people find it interesting to develope a develop research on this. Secondly and more importantly, though in order to contributing to the popularity of this trend, is the various ways that people can use to noticelearn about the history of anything. A particularly fascinating example of this is social media. Moreover, the Internet has placed the entire world (and all of the information in it), including our house's history, at our fingertips. In earlier times, conducting research entailed long hours searching librraylibrary shelves. Now, however, the same information can be accssedaccessed at the click of a button. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that the impact of social media along with accessabilityaccessibility to information makemakes people more curious to realizediscover the history of the houses or buildingbuildings they live in.
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The number of memebr of the society who become interested in the history of house or building they live in, has significantly increased over the past few decades. In this essay, I will discuss the possible reasons behind this phenomenon and give my own opinion.
The number of members of society who have become interested in the history of the houses or buildings they live in has significantly increased over the past few decades. In this essay, I will discuss the possible reasons behind this phenomenon and give my own opinion.
Firstly, It is vitall that we appreciate the importance of history. As the great impact of historical events on per age, more and more people are aware of such influences and they try to find out about history behind different things including the accommodation they live in. In my opinion, one of the significant reasons behind this trend, is the exponential impact of social media and movies like the counjoring on the individuals mind. Furthermore, nowadays the number of movies with plot of haunting houses are increase markedly a and such movies have a great impact on people mind. As a result people find interesting to develope a research on this.
Firstly, it is vital that we appreciate the importance of history. Given the significant impact of historical events on every era, more people are becoming aware of such influences and seek to uncover the history behind various aspects of their lives, including their homes. In my opinion, one of the key reasons behind this trend is the profound influence of social media and films, such as *The Conjuring*, on people's minds. Furthermore, the number of movies featuring haunted houses has risen markedly, and such films greatly affect public interest. As a result, many find it intriguing to research the history of their own residences.
Secondly and more importantly, though in order to popularity of this trend, is the various ways that people can use to notice about the history of anything. A particularly fascinating example of this is social media. Moreover, the Internet has placed the entire world (and all of the information in it) including our house history. In earlier times, conducting research entailed long hours searching librray shelves. Now, however, the same information can be accssed at the click of a button.
Secondly, and more importantly, the growing popularity of this trend can be attributed to the various methods now available for researching history. A particularly compelling example is social media. Moreover, the internet has made the entire world—and all its information, including the history of our homes—readily accessible. In the past, conducting research required hours of searching through library shelves. Today, however, the same information can be accessed with a single click.
By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that the impact of social media along with accessability to information make people more curious to realize the history of the houses or building they live in.
In conclusion, I reaffirm my stance that the influence of social media, combined with the ease of accessing information, has made people more curious about the history of the houses or buildings they inhabit.
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Vocabulary Range
average
Linking Words
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Spelling
weak
Grammar Accuracy
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Grammar Range
average
Cohesion
average
Paragraph Structure
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Task Response
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Task Achievement

  • Your essay addresses the prompt by discussing reasons for the growing interest in house history and suggesting ways to research it. However, the response could be more balanced—your second body paragraph focuses more on research methods rather than additional reasons.
  • Some ideas are unclear or repetitive (e.g., the influence of movies is mentioned twice without much development).
  • The conclusion restates your position but does not summarize key points effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion

  • The essay has a logical structure (introduction, body paragraphs, conclusion), but transitions between ideas could be smoother.
  • Some sentences are awkwardly phrased, making the flow less natural (e.g., "The number of memebr of the society who become interested...").
  • The second body paragraph shifts abruptly from discussing reasons to research methods without clear linking.

Lexical Resource

  • There are several spelling and word choice errors (memebr, counjoring, accssed, increase markedly a).
  • Some phrases are unnatural ("It is vitall that we appreciate the importance of history").
  • Repetition of words like impact and social media reduces variety.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

  • Multiple grammatical errors affect clarity:
    • Subject-verb agreement ("the number... has" is correct, but "the number of movies... are increase" is wrong).
    • Incorrect word forms ("find interesting to develope a research" → "find it interesting to research").
    • Missing articles ("the Internet has placed the entire world... including our house history").
  • Some sentences are overly complex and confusing ("As the great impact of historical events on per age").

Suggestions for Improvement

  1. Clarify and Expand Ideas – Develop each reason (e.g., cultural heritage, personal curiosity) and research method (e.g., archives, local historians) in separate paragraphs.
  2. Improve Grammar & Vocabulary – Proofread for errors and use more precise language (e.g., "haunted houses" instead of "haunting houses").
  3. Strengthen Cohesion – Use linking words (Furthermore, Additionally, For instance) to connect ideas smoothly.
  4. Refine Conclusion – Summarize key points rather than repeating the thesis.

With more precise language, clearer structure, and better grammar, your essay would be stronger. Keep practicing!