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Question: In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling in...

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It is true that in the future all kinds of transportation systemsystems will be autonomous and only humans wouldwill be the passengers of these vehicles. Numerous benefits and drawbacks contribute to this phenomenon, and in this essay, I will explain why I believe the drawbacks outweigh the merits. To begin with, in recent times, technology has been increasing rapidly, and it is believed by many scientists that in the next decadsdecades, driverless vehicles such as Tesla will replacedreplace traditional cars. These state-of-the-art vehicles offer a number of benfitsbenefits, such as prevntingpreventing the depletion of fossilefossil fuel resources and decreasing the carbon footprint. To illustrate, driverless vehicles are often powered by electricity and other renewable energies such as solar power. Consequently, less fossilefewer fossil fuel recoursesresources will be used and less green house fewer greenhouse gases will be emissionedemitted. However, despite the certain merits, this trend can come with some downsids ,downsides, such as potential hazards and a decrease in the number of job vacancies. Since these vehicles are driven by AI, itthey can make certain mistakes which resultsresult in irreparable damages. For example, if a minor software error happens in the program of ana driverless car, this could cause a catastrophic incident. Furthermore, by develovingdeveloping this cutting-edge innovation, many jobs, , such as taxi or bus driverdrivers, might be eliminated. In conclusion, while developing technology and inventing driverless vehicles mighmight have countless upsidesmupsides, including increaseincreasing the level of carbon dioxide, it has several draw backs ,drawbacks, such as crash accidents and a lack of job opportunitesopportunities for certain individuals.
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It is true that in the future all kinds of transportation system will be autonomous and only humans would be the passengers of these vehicles. Numerous benefits and drawbacks contribute to this phenomenon and in this essay, I will explain why I believe the drawbacks outweigh the merits.
It is true that in the future, all transportation systems will likely be autonomous, with humans serving solely as passengers. While this development offers numerous benefits, it also presents significant drawbacks, and in this essay, I will explain why I believe the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
To begin with, in recent times, technology has been increasing rapidly and it is believed by many scientists that in the next decads, driverless vehicles such as Tesla will replaced traditional cars. These state-of-the-art vehicles offer a number of benfits such as prevnting the depletion of fossile fuel resources and decreasing the carbon footprint. To illustrate, driverless vehicles are often powered by electricity and other renewable energies such as solar power. Consequently, less fossile fuel recourses will be used and less green house gases will be emissioned.
To begin with, technology has advanced rapidly in recent years, and many scientists predict that within the next few decades, driverless vehicles, such as those produced by Tesla, will replace traditional cars. These state-of-the-art vehicles offer several benefits, including reduced reliance on fossil fuels and a smaller carbon footprint. For instance, autonomous vehicles are often powered by electricity and renewable energy sources, such as solar power. As a result, fewer fossil fuel resources will be consumed, and greenhouse gas emissions will decrease.
However, despite the certain merits, this trend can come with some downsids ,such as potential hazards and decrease in the number of job vacancies. Since these vehicles are driven by AI, it can make certain mistakes which results in irreparable damages. For example, if a minor software error happens in the program of an driverless car, this could cause a catastrophic incident. Furthermore, by develoving this cutting-edge innovation, many jobs ,such as taxi or bus driver might be eliminated.
However, despite these advantages, this trend also carries significant drawbacks, such as potential safety risks and job losses. Since these vehicles are controlled by artificial intelligence, they may make errors that could lead to severe accidents. For example, even a minor software malfunction in an autonomous car could result in a catastrophic collision. Additionally, the widespread adoption of this technology could eliminate many jobs, particularly those in driving professions, such as taxi and bus drivers.
In conclusion, while developing technology and inventing driverless vehicles migh have countless upsidesm,including increase the level of carbon dioxide, it has several draw backs ,such as crash accidents and lack of job opportunites for certain individuals.
In conclusion, while the development of autonomous vehicles offers notable benefits, such as reducing carbon emissions, it also presents serious disadvantages, including safety concerns and the loss of employment opportunities for many individuals. Therefore, I believe the drawbacks of this innovation outweigh its merits.
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Feedback on Your Essay

Task Achievement:

  • Your essay addresses the prompt and presents a clear position (disadvantages outweigh advantages). However, the argument could be more balanced. While you mention benefits (reduced fossil fuel use, lower emissions), the discussion of disadvantages (safety risks, job losses) is stronger.
  • Some points lack development. For example, the claim that driverless cars reduce fossil fuel use needs more evidence or explanation (e.g., how electric vehicles compare to traditional ones).
  • The conclusion restates your position but could summarize key points more clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion:

  • The essay has a logical structure (introduction, body paragraphs, conclusion), but transitions between ideas could be smoother.
  • Some sentences are awkwardly phrased (e.g., "less green house gases will be emissioned"). Rephrasing for clarity would improve flow.
  • The second body paragraph shifts abruptly from benefits to drawbacks. A clearer topic sentence would help.

Lexical Resource:

  • There are spelling errors ("benfits," "prevnting," "fossile," "emissioned," "downsids," "develoving," "upsidesm"). Proofreading is essential.
  • Some word choices are unnatural ("irreparable damages" → "serious accidents," "increase the level of carbon dioxide" → "reduce carbon emissions").
  • Avoid repetition (e.g., "fossile fuel" appears multiple times; vary phrasing).

Grammatical Range and Accuracy:

  • Several grammatical errors affect clarity:
    • "in the next decads" → "in the next decades"
    • "will replaced" → "will replace"
    • "less fossile fuel recourses" → "fewer fossil fuel resources"
    • "if a minor software error happens in the program of an driverless car" → "if a minor software error occurs in a driverless car’s system"
  • Article errors ("an driverless car" → "a driverless car").
  • Subject-verb agreement issues ("this trend can come with some downsids" → "this trend comes with some downsides").

Suggestions for Improvement:

  1. Balance the discussion – Expand on advantages with more concrete examples.
  2. Proofread carefully – Correct spelling and grammar mistakes.
  3. Improve cohesion – Use linking words (e.g., "On the other hand," "Furthermore") to connect ideas smoothly.
  4. Clarify arguments – Avoid vague statements (e.g., "irreparable damages" – specify what kind).
  5. Vary vocabulary – Use synonyms to avoid repetition.

Overall, your essay has a clear stance and structure but needs refinement in language accuracy and argument development. Keep practicing!