Question: In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling in...
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It is thought that all of vehicles will be driverless and people in the future will be only passengers. Although this idea will have eitherboth advantages and disadvantages, I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and this essay will describe both sides of viewsthe argument.
Technology is in progress progressingsignificantly and the prediction of manufacturemanufacturing vehicles which are driverless in the near future is a fact. There are some advantages to this replacement, that including; allowing elderly people and people who suffer from physical problems to go somewhere or on a trip. This is an opportunity for this group of people to travel without asking others for help. Also, they can go to the hospital to dofor a check-up independently. Additionally, these cars will be designed inwith an accurate plan, so that the road's accidents will decrease dramatically, because one of the most important factors in accidents is human's fault error and not following rules. While these machines are designed based on following rules.
On the other hand, there are some possible disadvantages, such as the possibility of hacking the control system, thatwhich might be dangerous. For example, if a driverless car inon the road beis hacked and no one beis able to drive, they will be stuck inon the route tilluntil the emergency service will servicesarrive. This might have a negative effect on people's health. In addition, for a group of people, trusting on technology will be hard and they prefer not to use thatit.
In conclusion, although there are some possible disadvantagedisadvantages, there are plenty of certain advantages and I thisthink the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, because this opportunity helphelps people with some limitationlimitations to continue a normal life.
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Task Achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt and presents both advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles. However, the introduction could be clearer. Instead of saying "this idea will have either advantages and disadvantages," it would be better to say "this development has both advantages and disadvantages."
Some points are underdeveloped. For example, the argument about hacking could be expanded with more specific risks (e.g., cyberattacks leading to crashes).
The conclusion is somewhat repetitive. Instead of restating the advantages, you could summarize the key points more concisely.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a logical structure, but some sentences are awkwardly phrased, making the flow less smooth. For example:
"Technology is in progress significantly and prediction of manufacture vehicles which are driverless in the near future is a fact." (This could be rewritten as: "Technology is advancing rapidly, and the prediction that vehicles will soon be fully driverless is becoming a reality.")
Some transitions are missing. For instance, before discussing disadvantages, a phrase like "However, there are also concerns" would improve cohesion.
The conclusion repeats ideas from the introduction without adding depth.
Lexical Resource
There are some unnatural word choices and grammatical errors:
"This is opportunity for this group of people" → "This provides an opportunity for these individuals"
"road's accidents" → "road accidents" (no apostrophe needed)
"human's fault" → "human error"
Some phrases are unclear:
"designed in accurate plan" → "programmed precisely"
"till the emergency service will arrive" → "until emergency services arrive"
More varied vocabulary could be used (e.g., "autonomous vehicles" instead of "driverless cars").
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There are several grammatical mistakes:
"Although this idea will have either advantages and disadvantages" → "While this development has both advantages and disadvantages"
"they will be stuck in the route" → "they could be stranded on the road"
"I this the advantages outweigh" → "I believe the advantages outweigh"
Some verb tenses are incorrect:
"emergency service will arrive" → "emergency services arrive" (simple present for general statements)
Sentence structure could be improved for clarity (e.g., breaking long sentences into shorter ones).
Suggestions for Improvement
Clarify your introduction – State the topic clearly and avoid awkward phrasing.
Expand on key points – Provide more detailed examples (e.g., how hacking could be dangerous).
Improve transitions – Use linking words (However, Moreover, Consequently) to guide the reader.
Check grammar and word choice – Avoid unnatural expressions and correct errors.
Make the conclusion stronger – Summarize key arguments without repetition.
Overall, your essay presents a balanced view, but refining grammar, vocabulary, and structure will make it more effective. Keep practicing!