Feedback on Your Essay

Task Achievement

• Your essay addresses the prompt and presents both advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles. However, the introduction could be clearer. Instead of saying "this idea will have either advantages and disadvantages," it would be better to say "this development has both advantages and disadvantages."
• Some points are underdeveloped. For example, the argument about hacking could be expanded with more specific risks (e.g., cyberattacks leading to crashes).
• The conclusion is somewhat repetitive. Instead of restating the advantages, you could summarize the key points more concisely.

Coherence and Cohesion

• The essay has a logical structure, but some sentences are awkwardly phrased, making the flow less smooth. For example:
  • "Technology is in progress significantly and prediction of manufacture vehicles which are driverless in the near future is a fact." (This could be rewritten as: "Technology is advancing rapidly, and the prediction that vehicles will soon be fully driverless is becoming a reality.")
• Some transitions are missing. For instance, before discussing disadvantages, a phrase like "However, there are also concerns" would improve cohesion.
• The conclusion repeats ideas from the introduction without adding depth.

Lexical Resource

• There are some unnatural word choices and grammatical errors:
  • "This is opportunity for this group of people" → "This provides an opportunity for these individuals"
  • "road's accidents" → "road accidents" (no apostrophe needed)
  • "human's fault" → "human error"
• Some phrases are unclear:
  • "designed in accurate plan" → "programmed precisely"
  • "till the emergency service will arrive" → "until emergency services arrive"
• More varied vocabulary could be used (e.g., "autonomous vehicles" instead of "driverless cars").

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

• There are several grammatical mistakes:
  • "Although this idea will have either advantages and disadvantages" → "While this development has both advantages and disadvantages"
  • "they will be stuck in the route" → "they could be stranded on the road"
  • "I this the advantages outweigh" → "I believe the advantages outweigh"
• Some verb tenses are incorrect:
  • "emergency service will arrive" → "emergency services arrive" (simple present for general statements)
• Sentence structure could be improved for clarity (e.g., breaking long sentences into shorter ones).

Suggestions for Improvement

1. Clarify your introduction – State the topic clearly and avoid awkward phrasing.
2. Expand on key points – Provide more detailed examples (e.g., how hacking could be dangerous).
3. Improve transitions – Use linking words (However, Moreover, Consequently) to guide the reader.
4. Check grammar and word choice – Avoid unnatural expressions and correct errors.
5. Make the conclusion stronger – Summarize key arguments without repetition.

Overall, your essay presents a balanced view, but refining grammar, vocabulary, and structure will make it more effective. Keep practicing!