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Question: In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to re...

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It is argued that in the future, nobody will have a tendency to purchase newspapers or books as every one everyone can stay informed and read everything they wish throghthrough social media platforms without spending money. There are a numerous factors that contribute to this matter. In this essay, I will explore some of them and explain why I agree with this claim. To begin with, many individuals enjoy reading books and newspapers and they find it not only a pleasant experience, but also a nostalgianostalgic. They believe it is an authentic experience that cannot be obtained by reading books online. However, bywith developing technologies and emerging cutting-edge innovationinnovations, I believe we will witness the disappearance of paper-based information. Undoubtedly, it is both easy to access and convinientconvenient to carry when it comes to using e-books. For example, if you wish to buy all of the Harry Potter books, you do not have to pay for them anymore or carry those heavy books since, they are accessible through the internet. Furthermore, it is possible to access to a milion millions of news only byarticles with just one click while the amount of information in a onesingle printed newspaper is almostquite limited. Also, news is more up-to-dateddate in the online form, as a result, people can keep up with the current events. To illustrate, if you wish to check the weather conditions, you can easily pick up your phone and search for it. So, I think in fifty years, due to the dominance of social networks and the internet, most of printed newspapernewspapers will have been vanished. In conclusion, although reading books and printed newspapers can give us a sense of nostalgia, I belivebelieve they will be replaced by their online counterparts in the near future.
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It is argued that in the future, nobody will have a tendency to purchase newspapers or books as every one can stay informed and read everything they wish throgh social media platforms without spending money. There are a numerous factors that contribute to this matter. In this essay, I will explore some of them and explain why I agree with this claim.
It is argued that in the future, people will no longer purchase newspapers or books, as everyone can access information and read whatever they desire through social media platforms without financial cost. Numerous factors contribute to this trend. In this essay, I will examine some of these reasons and explain why I support this viewpoint.
To begin with, many individuals enjoy reading books and newspapers and they find it not only a pleasant experience, but also a nostalgia. They believe it is an authentic experience that cannot be obtained by reading books online. However, by developing technologies and emerging cutting-edge innovation, I believe we will witness the disappearance of paper-based information. Undoubtedly, it is both easy to access and convinient to carry when it comes to using e-books. For example, if you wish to buy all of the Harry Potter books, you do not have to pay for them anymore or carry those heavy books since, they are accessible through the internet.
To begin with, many individuals enjoy reading physical books and newspapers, finding the experience not only pleasurable but also nostalgic. They believe it offers an authenticity that digital platforms cannot replicate. However, with advancing technology and the rise of cutting-edge innovations, I believe paper-based media will eventually disappear. Undoubtedly, e-books are more convenient—they are easier to access and carry. For instance, if someone wishes to read the entire *Harry Potter* series, they no longer need to purchase heavy physical copies, as these books are readily available online.
Furthermore, it is possible to access to a milion of news only by one click while the amount of information in a one printed newspaper is almost limited. Also, news is more up-to-dated in the online form, as a result, people can keep up with the current events. To illustrate, if you wish to check the weather conditions, you can easily pick up your phone and search it. So, I think in fifty years,due to dominance of social networks and internet, most of printed newspaper will have been vanished.
Furthermore, accessing millions of news articles is possible with just one click, whereas printed newspapers offer a limited amount of information. Online news is also more up-to-date, allowing people to stay informed about current events in real time. For example, checking the weather forecast requires only a quick search on a smartphone. Therefore, I believe that within fifty years, due to the dominance of social media and the internet, most printed newspapers will have vanished.
In conclusion, although reading books and printed newspapers can give us a sense of nostalgia, I belive they will replaced by their online counterparts in the near future.
In conclusion, although physical books and newspapers evoke nostalgia, I believe they will eventually be replaced by their digital counterparts in the near future.
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Overall Band Score
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Overview
Vocabulary Range
average
Linking Words
average
Spelling
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Grammar Accuracy
average
Grammar Range
average
Cohesion
average
Paragraph Structure
average
Task Response
strong
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Feedback on Your Essay

Task Achievement

  • Position Clarity: Your stance is clear—you agree that printed newspapers and books will decline due to digital alternatives. However, the introduction could be more concise. The phrase "There are a numerous factors that contribute to this matter" is vague and could be removed.
  • Supporting Arguments: You provide relevant points (convenience, accessibility, up-to-date information), but some examples could be stronger. For instance, instead of just mentioning Harry Potter, you could elaborate on cost savings or environmental benefits of e-books.
  • Conclusion: The conclusion restates your position well, but "belive they will replaced" has a grammatical error (should be "will be replaced").

Coherence and Cohesion

  • Logical Flow: The essay is logically structured, but some transitions could be smoother. For example, "However, by developing technologies..." feels abrupt. A phrase like "However, with advancing technology..." would improve flow.
  • Paragraphing: The body paragraphs are well-organized, but the second body paragraph could be split for clarity—one part on books, another on newspapers.
  • Repetition: Avoid repeating "printed newspapers and books" too often. Synonyms like "physical media" or "hard copies" could help.

Lexical Resource

  • Vocabulary Range: You use a good variety of words (nostalgia, cutting-edge innovation, dominance), but some phrases are awkward ("a milion of news" should be "millions of news articles").
  • Word Choice Errors:
    • "throgh" → "through"
    • "convinient" → "convenient"
    • "up-to-dated" → "up-to-date"
    • "belive" → "believe"
    • "vanished" → "phased out" (more natural than "vanished")

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

  • Sentence Structure: Mostly correct, but some errors affect clarity:
    • "by developing technologies and emerging cutting-edge innovation" → "With the development of technology and the emergence of cutting-edge innovations..."
    • "it is possible to access to a milion of news" → "it is possible to access millions of news articles"
  • Tense Consistency: The future prediction is mostly correct, but "will have been vanished" is incorrect. Use "will have vanished" or "will have been phased out."

Suggestions for Improvement

  1. Refine Examples: Strengthen examples with data (e.g., "E-books are 30% cheaper than printed books, making them more appealing").
  2. Proofread Carefully: Watch for spelling and grammar mistakes. Reading aloud helps catch errors.
  3. Avoid Redundancy: Instead of repeating "printed newspapers and books," use synonyms.
  4. Smooth Transitions: Use linking words (Moreover, Consequently) to improve flow.

Overall, your essay presents a clear argument with good supporting points. With improved grammar, vocabulary precision, and stronger examples, it could be even more effective. Keep practicing!