Feedback on Your Essay:

Task Achievement:

• Clarity of Position: Your stance is clear—you agree that printed materials will be replaced by digital ones. However, the introduction could be more concise and grammatically polished.
• Supporting Arguments: You provide relevant points (easy access and cost savings), but the examples (e.g., Iran in 2020) lack specificity. More concrete data (e.g., statistics, named websites) would strengthen your argument.
• Conclusion: Restates your position but could be more refined. Avoid informal phrasing like "I'm agree" (should be "I agree").

Coherence and Cohesion:

• Logical Flow: The essay follows a logical structure (introduction, two body paragraphs, conclusion), but transitions between ideas could be smoother.
• Linking Words: Some cohesive devices are used ("The first and foremost reason," "In addition"), but others are awkward ("That is to say" could be replaced with "For instance").
• Paragraphing: Each paragraph focuses on one main idea, but some sentences are overly long and confusing (e.g., "This means is that expended pdf form of books are put on website which citizens can afford them free or budget charge.").

Lexical Resource:

• Vocabulary Range: You use some advanced terms ("diminished," "contemporary society," "facilitated"), but phrasing is often unnatural ("physically resources," "expended pdf form").
• Word Choice Errors:
  • "Technology is being thrived" → "Technology is thriving"
  • "E_book" → "e-books" (correct hyphenation)
  • "Bygone era and current age" → "Past and present" (more natural)
• Repetition: "Online resources" is overused; vary with "digital content," "e-books," etc.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy:

• Sentence Structure: Many sentences are grammatically incorrect or awkward:
  • "This essay agrees that physically resources will be diminished" → "This essay argues that physical resources will diminish"
  • "Individuals capable to visit numerous sites" → "Individuals can access numerous sites"
• Tense Errors:
  • "It was done a comparison research" → "A comparative study was conducted"
  • "If the online resources had not been, people would not save money" → Mixed conditional; better: "If online resources did not exist, people would not save money."
• Subject-Verb Agreement:
  • "E_books able people to read" → "E-books enable people to read"

Suggestions for Improvement:

1. Revise for Grammar & Clarity: Simplify complex sentences and correct errors.
2. Strengthen Examples: Use specific data (e.g., "According to a 2020 study in Iran, 70% of readers preferred e-books due to cost savings.")
3. Improve Cohesion: Use smoother transitions ("Furthermore," "Moreover") and avoid redundancy.
4. Proofread: Check for awkward phrasing ("take profit" → "benefit").

Overall, your essay presents a clear argument but needs refinement in grammar, vocabulary, and supporting details. Keep practicing!