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Question: Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory j...

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In the average world, all the time, there are some timesmoments that everybody can love that and the others might not, love and as a whole it depends toon every person’s characteristiccharacteristics, but what is important is that suchthose people who do not enjoy, do not try to change a bad situation or alter their position. The other group dodoes not persuade and trytries to solve the problem. To be honest, I am a person who does not endure in bad circumstances and try handlingtries to handle and changing maychange my bad times. In this essay, I want to argue about both lines of thinking line. Today’s life throughthroughout the world is full of different situations, that some of themwhich are satisfying and the other others can be boring. For example, a good salary and occupation are enjoyable, and while on the other hand, shortage, illness, and bad relationshiprelationships are harmful for most people. and in In every position, some people prefer staying and, as a fighter fighters, try to control the bad situations. These personpeople have high flexibility and a sustainable nature. They believe that bad and good cannot be eternal and that after every shortage, this situation will be changedchange. Investing onin positive abilityabilities and good pointpoints is their belief, and they struggle to find and learn big lessonlessons in every unsatisfied period. Other The other group there isconsists of people who attempt to don’t aspectnot accept bad thingthings and always try to control every timeeverything. Most of the time, they suffer from high scarcescarcity, and because of this, they lose their current life and try to forget unfavorable things. Actually, they live in bigdeep denial, and this kind of beingexistence can borncreate unenjoyable momentmoments for them. Most of them do not recognize their abilityabilities and live in a mental fight with their selves themselves because their internal and core beliefsbelief of livelife is happiness. and for To gain this, competition they do every job everything, while most of the time we cannot finefind any kind of positive emotion in their life. In conclusion, I should say we can not cannot say which of thisthese ways of being is good or bad, and it dependent todepends on that job or position. and I think both of them isare important, and the necessarilynecessity of thingthe situation will define our behavior; what. What is important is that we do not forget or abilityour abilities and distinguish which type is better and beneficial.
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In the average world, all the time, there are some times that everybody can love that and the others might not love and as a whole it depends to every person’s characteristic, but what is important is that such people who do not enjoy, do not try to change bad situation or alter their position. The other group do not persuade and try to solve the problem. To be honest I am a person who does not endure in bad circumstances and try handling and changing may bad times. In this essay I want argue about both thinking line.
In today's world, people constantly encounter both pleasant and unpleasant situations. While some individuals embrace all experiences, others struggle with adversity. What truly matters is how people respond to challenges—some passively endure difficulties, while others actively seek solutions. Personally, I believe in confronting and improving unfavorable circumstances. This essay will examine both perspectives.
Today’s life through the world is full of different situations that some of them are satisfying and the other can be boring. For example good salary and occupation are enjoyable and the other hand shortage, illness and bad relationship are harmful for most people and in every position some people prefer staying and as a fighter try to control the bad situations. These person have high flexibility and sustainable nature. They believe that bad and good cannot be eternal and after every shortage, this situation will be changed. Investing on positive ability and good point is their belief and they struggle to find and learn big lesson in every unsatisfied period.
Modern life presents a variety of experiences, ranging from fulfilling ones, such as a rewarding career, to difficult ones, like financial hardship or illness. Some individuals choose to endure hardships, demonstrating resilience and adaptability. They believe that challenges are temporary and that perseverance leads to growth. By focusing on their strengths and learning from adversity, they turn obstacles into opportunities for self-improvement.
Other group there is people who attempt to don’t aspect bad thing and always try to control every time. Most of the time they suffer from high scarce and because of this they lose current life and try forget unfavorable things. Actually they live in big denial and this kind of being can born unenjoyable moment for them. Most of them do not recognize their ability and live in mental fight with their selves because their internal and core beliefs of live is happiness and for gain this competition they do every job while most of the time we cannot fine any kind of positive emotion in their life.
Conversely, there are those who resist accepting difficulties, constantly striving to avoid discomfort. Often, this mindset leads to frustration, as they struggle against inevitable hardships. Many in this group live in denial, unable to appreciate their own potential. Their relentless pursuit of happiness sometimes results in inner conflict, as they fail to find genuine fulfillment despite their efforts.
In conclusion I should say we can not say which of this being is good or bad and it dependent to that job or position and I think both of them is important and the necessarily of thing will define our behavior; what is important is that do not forget or ability and distinguish which type is better and beneficial.
Ultimately, neither approach is entirely right or wrong—each has merit depending on the situation. What is crucial is recognizing our own capabilities and determining which response is most constructive. The key lies in balancing acceptance and action to navigate life's challenges effectively.
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Vocabulary Range
average
Linking Words
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Spelling
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Grammar Accuracy
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Grammar Range
average
Cohesion
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Paragraph Structure
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Task Response
average
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Task Achievement:
The essay attempts to address the prompt by discussing both views and providing an opinion. However, the response lacks clarity and coherence in presenting the arguments. The ideas are not well-developed, and the examples provided are vague or unclear. The conclusion is somewhat confusing and does not effectively summarize the discussion. To improve, focus on structuring the essay with clear topic sentences, supporting details, and a more precise conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion:
The essay struggles with logical flow and organization. Sentences and ideas are often disjointed, making it difficult to follow the argument. Transition words and phrases are either missing or used incorrectly, which affects the overall coherence. Work on using cohesive devices (e.g., "On the other hand," "In contrast," "Furthermore") to connect ideas more smoothly. Additionally, paragraphs should be better structured—each should focus on a single main idea with supporting points.

Lexical Resource:
The vocabulary is often imprecise or awkwardly phrased, which detracts from clarity. There are several instances of incorrect word choice (e.g., "average world," "big denial," "unfavorable things"). Some sentences are overly wordy or unclear (e.g., "The other group do not persuade and try to solve the problem"). To improve, use more natural and accurate vocabulary. Avoid repetitive phrasing and aim for variety in word choice.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy:
The essay contains numerous grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ("These person have"), incorrect verb tenses ("do not aspect bad thing"), and awkward sentence structures ("In this essay I want argue about both thinking line"). These errors make the essay difficult to understand. Focus on improving sentence structure, verb forms, and article usage. Proofreading for basic grammar mistakes would significantly enhance clarity.

Suggestions for Improvement:

  1. Clarity and Precision: Rewrite sentences to convey ideas more clearly. Avoid vague or overly complex phrasing.
  2. Organization: Use a clear structure—introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a concise conclusion. Each paragraph should have a central idea.
  3. Grammar and Vocabulary: Review basic grammar rules and practice using more accurate and varied vocabulary.
  4. Examples: Provide specific, relevant examples to support arguments (e.g., real-life scenarios or studies).
  5. Proofreading: Always review the essay for errors before submission.

The essay shows an attempt to engage with the topic, but refining these areas will significantly improve its quality.