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Question: Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required ...

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It is considered by many individuals that skilled people should remain in locations where they improveddeveloped their talents, in contrast, others argue that they shoudshould make decisiondecisions about where they desire for livingto live. I believe that they must choose their favoritepreferred place for livingto live. On the one hand, there are some reasons why many individuals obligebelieve professional workers have to mantainremain in nations where they learned their crafts, alsoas it is seen as fundamental helpessential support for organizations which gavethat provided services to improvedevelop these skilled people. Firstly, those nations where are donating that offer various scholarships to students, have some expections expectations that students must remain in their areas and returnrepay these investments onin organizations, even if these countries are not developed. Secondly, everyone should play a significant role in developing regions where they growgrew up and received facilities, and people believe it is their responsibilities,responsibility. Finally, skillful individuals are capable of enhancing other people's welfare situations,; for example, engineers can selloffer their ideas cheapermore affordably to thatthe regions they grew up in to reduce poverty rather than expensive to otherscharging higher prices elsewhere. On the other hand, a few factors mentioned to support the first opinion, which states that said professional experts have to maintain must stay in their initial place where they received services, but I agree they can select everwherechoose wherever they prefer to go. For example, they are not forced to waste their lives where they can not cannot grow faster. Moreover, several governments do not pay enough attention to skilled people, and the best strategy is migrating to other advanced nations. In conclusion, differentthere are differing opinions are regarding to the future of professional experts,. I am convinced that they should make decisions according to their own resolutions,; if they wantwish, they can spend their time onin the countries where they gotbecame skilled or in other countries where they preferedprefer.
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It is considered by many individuals that skilled people should remain in locations where they improved their talents, in contrast, others argue that they shoud make decision about where they desire for living. I believe that they must choose their favorite place for living. On the one hand, there are some reasons why many individuals oblige professional workers have to mantain in nations they learned crafts, also it is seen as fundamental help for organizations which gave services to improve these skilled people. Firstly, those nations where are donating various scholarships to students, have some expections that students must remain in their areas and return these investments on organizations, even these countries are not developed. Secondly, everyone should play a significant role in developing regions where they grow and received facilities, and people believe it is their responsibilities, Finally, skillful individuals are capable of enhancing other people's welfare situations, for example, engineers can sell their ideas cheaper to that regions they grew to reduce poverty rather than expensive to others. On the other hand, few factors mentioned to support the first opinion that said professional experts have to maintain in their initial place where they received services, but I agree they can select everwhere they prefer to go. For example, they are not forced to waste their lives where they can not grow faster. Moreover, several governments do not pay enough attention to skilled people and the best strategy is migrating to other advanced nations. In conclusion, different opinions are regarding to the future of professional experts, I am convinced that they should make decisions according to their resolutions, if they want they can spend their time on countries they got skilled or other countries where they prefered.
Here is the corrected version: Many people believe skilled individuals should remain in the countries where they developed their talents, while others argue they should be free to choose where to live. I believe professionals should have the freedom to select their preferred location. On one hand, there are valid reasons why some argue professionals should stay where they were trained. Countries that invest in education through scholarships often expect graduates to contribute locally, repaying this investment. This is particularly important in developing nations where skilled workers are scarce. Additionally, professionals have a moral obligation to support communities that nurtured their growth. For example, engineers could implement affordable solutions in their home regions to alleviate poverty rather than offering expensive services elsewhere. On the other hand, I support the view that professionals should choose their place of residence freely. They should not be forced to remain in environments that limit their growth potential. Furthermore, when governments fail to properly value skilled workers, migration to more developed nations may be the most practical solution. In conclusion, while opinions differ regarding where professionals should work, I firmly believe they should have the freedom to decide based on personal circumstances. They may choose to contribute to their home country or pursue opportunities elsewhere according to their preferences.
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Overall Band Score
5
Overview
Vocabulary Range
average
Linking Words
weak
Spelling
average
Grammar Accuracy
weak
Grammar Range
average
Cohesion
weak
Paragraph Structure
average
Task Response
average
Word Count
sufficient
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Task Achievement

  • Strengths: You addressed both sides of the argument and provided a clear opinion, which is essential for Task Achievement. Your examples (e.g., engineers selling ideas cheaper in their home country) help support your points.
  • Areas for Improvement:
    • Some ideas are unclear due to grammar and phrasing issues (e.g., "those nations where are donating various scholarships" should be "nations that provide scholarships").
    • The second body paragraph does not fully contrast the opposing view—it mostly repeats the first argument. A stronger counter-argument (e.g., brain drain vs. global opportunities) would improve balance.
    • The conclusion is repetitive; try to summarize key points more concisely.

Coherence and Cohesion

  • Strengths: The essay has a logical structure (introduction, two body paragraphs, conclusion) and uses some linking words (On the one hand, On the other hand, In conclusion).
  • Areas for Improvement:
    • Some sentences are hard to follow due to grammar errors (e.g., "few factors mentioned to support the first opinion that said professional experts have to maintain in their initial place").
    • More cohesive devices (e.g., however, furthermore, consequently) would improve flow.
    • Paragraphs could be better organized—each should focus on one main idea with supporting details.

Lexical Resource

  • Strengths: You use topic-related vocabulary (scholarships, skilled individuals, migrating).
  • Areas for Improvement:
    • Some word choices are awkward or incorrect (e.g., "mantain" instead of "remain", "crafts" instead of "skills").
    • Repetition of phrases ("professional experts", "skilled people") could be varied (e.g., "highly trained professionals", "specialists").
    • Avoid informal phrasing ("waste their lives" → "limit their careers").

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

  • Strengths: You attempt complex sentences, which is good for higher scores.
  • Areas for Improvement:
    • Many grammatical errors affect clarity (e.g., "where they improved their talents" → "where they trained"; "they shoud make decision" → "they should decide").
    • Subject-verb agreement issues ("few factors mentioned to support" → "few factors are mentioned").
    • Article errors ("the best strategy is migrating" → "the best strategy is to migrate").

Suggestions for Improvement

  1. Clarify Ideas: Simplify sentences to ensure clarity (e.g., "those nations where are donating scholarships" → "countries that fund scholarships").
  2. Balance Arguments: The second body paragraph should present a stronger opposing view (e.g., freedom of movement, global job markets).
  3. Grammar & Vocabulary: Review verb tenses, articles, and word choices. Use tools like Grammarly or ask a tutor for corrections.
  4. Cohesion: Use more linking words (However, Moreover, As a result) to improve flow.

Overall, your essay has potential but needs refinement in grammar, clarity, and argument balance. Keep practicing!