Question: Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory j...
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Some individuals believe that it is best to accept unfavorable circumstance, such as an unsatisfaying job or financial difficulties. In contrast, others think that it is more beneficial to attempt to improve such conditions. From my point of view all people that who live in bad situations always should trying to improve their life.
On the one hand, some people are silence in any bad situation and often accept all bad things in their life. One reason why people hold this view is that, these individuals think that they do not have any effect on their problems. In their view, unpleasant events always happen in life, and people must accept them. For instance, when offer them an unsatisfactory job with a low income they say we should accept this situation and continue living with it.
On the other hand, the rest of the group , on the contrary , try to solve unsatisfactory in their life and they believe that always should be in trying to improve their life. A strong argument in favor of this view is that, they say, all problems , bad events and unfavorable condition in life are improvable they just require more effort from us. For example if we do not like our workplace we can easily change our job. I think this view can be helpful for have a good life.
Taking everything into consideration, although some people say that we just accept bad siuation and others say that we should try to improve them, I think all people never accept bad things in their life and always be in trying to solve and improve them.
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Some individuals believe that it is best to accept unfavorable circumstance, such as an unsatisfaying job or financial difficulties. In contrast, others think that it is more beneficial to attempt to improve such conditions. From my point of view all people that who live in bad situations always should trying to improve their life.
On the one hand, some people are silence in any bad situation and often accept all bad things in their life. One reason why people hold this view is that, these individuals think that they do not have any effect on their problems. In their view, unpleasant events always happen in life, and people must accept them. For instance, when offer them an unsatisfactory job with a low income they say we should accept this situation and continue living with it.
On the other hand, the rest of the group , on the contrary , try to solve unsatisfactory in their life and they believe that always should be in trying to improve their life. A strong argument in favor of this view is that, they say, all problems , bad events and unfavorable condition in life are improvable they just require more effort from us. For example if we do not like our workplace we can easily change our job. I think this view can be helpful for have a good life.
Taking everything into consideration, although some people say that we just accept bad siuation and others say that we should try to improve them, I think all people never accept bad things in their life and always be in trying to solve and improve them.