Question: Some employers are willing to give their workers a certain amount of unpaid sabbatical tim...

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The idea of offering employees sabbatical time has become quite fashionable recently, with some major companies believing it has great benefits. However, there is also substantial opposition to the concept, and we will discuss the two views now. 24 Those employers who support unpaid sabbaticals often highlight the motivating effect which such leave can have on an employee. They feel that, at a time when people are under pressure, a certain amount of extended leave can allow someone to return to work feeling refreshed and more committed to the company. A second point in favour is that such leave does not cost the company anything, as the employee stops drawing a salary. Indeed, it seems that such breaks might actually save money, as departments can be downsized without the need for redundancies or compensation. On the other hand, many other employers feel that this practice has a disruptive effect which outweighs its possible benefit to the individual. For example, if employees have a certain skill or responsibility, they must be replaced by someone who is similarly qualified, probably involving a cost in training or hiring a new worker. Companies are also reluctant to allow skilled employees to drift away from their business, fearing, with some justification, that the person might lose interest or even go to work for a competitor. Finally, some employers feel that the whole idea of sabbaticals is more suited to an academic context such as universities or research institutes, where the employee will be working on personal interests which coincide with their field of study, which is rarely the case among corporate employees. To sum up, it seems true that the problems caused by unpaid sabbaticals do indeed outweigh the potential advantages. Although the individual employee may be refreshed, the disruption and costs caused by this absence are unreasonable for the company and for the colleagues left behind at work.
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Overall Band Score
7.5
Overview
Vocabulary Range
average
Linking Words
strong
Spelling
strong
Grammar Accuracy
strong
Grammar Range
average
Cohesion
strong
Paragraph Structure
strong
Task Response
strong
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sufficient
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Task Response: You address both views and present a clear opinion, which is good. However, the arguments lack depth and specific examples. The point about "downsizing without redundancies" is conceptually weak (sabbaticals are usually temporary, not a restructuring tool). The counter-argument regarding replacement costs is stronger but could be developed further. The conclusion is decisive but feels slightly repetitive.

Coherence & Cohesion: The structure is logical (Intro → View A → View B → Conclusion) and paragraphing is clear. Linking words (However, On the other hand, For example, Finally) are used mechanically but effectively. Referencing (such leave, this practice, the person) works well to avoid repetition.

Lexical Resource: Vocabulary is adequate (motivating effect, disruptive effect, outweighs, redundancies) but lacks precision and sophistication. Phrases like "quite fashionable recently" and "drift away" are slightly informal or imprecise for academic writing. There is some repetition (employee, company, leave).

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Grammar is generally accurate with a mix of simple and complex sentences. However, the range is limited; most complex sentences rely on basic which/that relative clauses. There are few examples of conditionals, passive forms, or more advanced structures (e.g., Had the company offered..., Not only does it...).

Key Improvements:

  1. Develop arguments: Explain why a refreshed employee benefits the organisation long-term (retention, innovation) rather than just stating it.
  2. Refine vocabulary: Replace general phrases ("great benefits," "certain amount") with precise collocations (enhanced retention, prolonged absence, operational continuity).
  3. Vary grammar: Incorporate conditionals (If companies allowed..., employees would...) or concessive clauses (While sabbaticals offer respite, they impose...).