Question: In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard ...

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It is widely debated in some cultures that children should be given this massage that with hard attempt they would achieve whatever they want. One of the most significant disadvantages of children can achieve something if they try hard is, everything will not be achieve just with effort. creating this attitude may harm children because for becoming successful, various items are required and attempt is just one of them. young people may feel lose more than they should be if they could not achieve their goals, consequently they will lose their self-steem and confidence. Unfortunately, in the flip side, social media are trying to create some fake and unreal belief in children with bragging about success, something that awareness can prevent its possible hurts. On the contrary, there are some advantages, for instance this attitude raise children's confidence and create a good sense of perseverance. Also they will follow their dreams enthusiastically. Although these are merit factors for everyone but are not enough, and may caused young people think with each failure in their career life or educational life, they are not good enough and everything was their fault. In conclusion, I believe, encouraging children to put %100 of their ability and effort to achieve is not a good idea, unless remind them regularly that sometimes in real life, people become failed and it is common. As a result creating this belief due to the reasons I have mentioned above has more disadvantages.
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