Question: Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. O...
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People have different views about the effect of advertising on society, some believe they are completely successful in their careers while others suppose people are used to seeing advertisements so they are not affected by companies. I reckon the first group is right, no matter how much time passes, companies can compel us to buy their products.
Individuals are still vulnerable. There are plenty of reasons why people act like this, firstly it is on companies, due to they use new attitude for selling their products every day, so people would not used to it. Second, they conduct research on people's needs and then convince them through tricks and psychological methods that their product will solve that particular need, so a feeling of need for a product that in fact they do not need is created among people. The third thing involved in this matter is the society that is moving towards consumerism.
On the other hand, there are several reasons for people who have this point of view that we are not affected by advertisements. Firstly, propaganda is repetitive so they have lost their impact.
Secondly, thanks to social media people can share their bad experiences with an advertised company, as a result, others will not make any purchases from that special company no matter how much they advertise.
In conclusion, my honost opinion is that people are still on the verge of believing advertisements respectfully to all the reasons the rest of society have.
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People have different views about the effect of advertising on society, some believe they are completely successful in their careers while others suppose people are used to seeing advertisements so they are not affected by companies. I reckon the first group is right, no matter how much time passes, companies can compel us to buy their products.
Individuals are still vulnerable. There are plenty of reasons why people act like this, firstly it is on companies, due to they use new attitude for selling their products every day, so people would not used to it. Second, they conduct research on people's needs and then convince them through tricks and psychological methods that their product will solve that particular need, so a feeling of need for a product that in fact they do not need is created among people. The third thing involved in this matter is the society that is moving towards consumerism.
On the other hand, there are several reasons for people who have this point of view that we are not affected by advertisements. Firstly, propaganda is repetitive so they have lost their impact.
Secondly, thanks to social media people can share their bad experiences with an advertised company, as a result, others will not make any purchases from that special company no matter how much they advertise.
In conclusion, my honost opinion is that people are still on the verge of believing advertisements respectfully to all the reasons the rest of society have.