Question: In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.
W...
Click on red question marks (?) to see an explanation for each change. Some changes are only suggestions and don't mean the original is necessarily wrong.
People have different views about owning or renting a house, I suppose that would be better to buy a house if someone has the ability to handle financial stuff.
I think like this because I see that in my family, my fox and my uncle have the same amount of money, but we decide to buy a house while my uncle rents a house and with the rest of the money by a really expensive car, after years he lost his car and the money he rented the house was less valuable, but our money became much more because houses become expensive. Another reason for supporting my idea is my country's problems, Iran in recent decades has had a really bad economic situation, nobody can buy a house in recent years because prices are becoming more and more every second and also people having problems with providing their necessary nutrients as a result no one thinks about buying a house while the price for renting is also increasing with an astonishing rate. If anybody in my country rents a house this year, for the next year he or she will not be able to rent the same house with the same amount of money.
So after all my personal experiences, I think people are right to decide to buy over rent because it has too many benefits, for example, it is like saving money for the future of your children while you can live in it until then and also you are reliving that if something happens you always have a banknote. beyond this, I reckon moving from one house to another or leaving the neighborhood when you are renting a house are tough things and also bring children to stress because they have to leave all their friends, but if you buy a house there is no need to do all of that hard stuff.
In conclusion, in my honest opinion, some people choose to buy over rent because of benefits like saving money, don't be worried about raising prices for house renting, no need for moving, no pressure on children, and a sustainable life.
This section presents vocabulary suggestions. Highlighted words are either too simple or are repeated more than 3 times . Please note that some suggested alternatives might require changes to other parts of the sentence.
This section presents a professionally wirtten variation of your essay and highlights the differences.
People have different views about owning or renting a house, I suppose that would be better to buy a house if someone has the ability to handle financial stuff.
I think like this because I see that in my family, my fox and my uncle have the same amount of money, but we decide to buy a house while my uncle rents a house and with the rest of the money by a really expensive car, after years he lost his car and the money he rented the house was less valuable, but our money became much more because houses become expensive. Another reason for supporting my idea is my country's problems, Iran in recent decades has had a really bad economic situation, nobody can buy a house in recent years because prices are becoming more and more every second and also people having problems with providing their necessary nutrients as a result no one thinks about buying a house while the price for renting is also increasing with an astonishing rate. If anybody in my country rents a house this year, for the next year he or she will not be able to rent the same house with the same amount of money.
So after all my personal experiences, I think people are right to decide to buy over rent because it has too many benefits, for example, it is like saving money for the future of your children while you can live in it until then and also you are reliving that if something happens you always have a banknote. beyond this, I reckon moving from one house to another or leaving the neighborhood when you are renting a house are tough things and also bring children to stress because they have to leave all their friends, but if you buy a house there is no need to do all of that hard stuff.
In conclusion, in my honest opinion, some people choose to buy over rent because of benefits like saving money, don't be worried about raising prices for house renting, no need for moving, no pressure on children, and a sustainable life.