Question: Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory j...
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People are calling into question the usefulness of staying in a job neither are they satisfied, nor they have a high income. While some advocate continuing work in such situations, others dismiss them as completely idle precious time. Both sides of the argument present rational ideas, which will be elaborated.
To begin with, proponents of work in bad situations assert that the benefits accruing from it are by no means negligible. A good illustration of this is the scientist who works voluntarily for several years, not only do they work for long hours without attaining a salary, but also their abilities are underestimated, in addition to behaving in impolite ways with them. Indeed, they tolerate these unfriendly workplaces for the sake of obtaining several things, some of which are being skillful, willpower, problem-solving, and data analysis. The more marketable skills they have, the more they are likely to be experts. As a result, they can find better positions in well-known organizations.
On the contrary, opponents put forward the argument that working in bad conditions causes some deleterious effects on individuals, hence, job seekers should be aware when it comes to selecting a workplace. The most compelling reason justifying their assertion is that the time and energy expended on working in harsh workplaces can be put to better use in a healthy environment that helps them to foster their aptitude as well as manifest their ulterior talent resulting in having a sense of achievement.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that we ought to consider some criteria such as the behavior of the boss, and colleagues, and ambiance when applying for a job, since it can have both deleterious and positive impacts on our social life leading to either obtaining unprecedented success or failed.
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People are calling into question the usefulness of staying in a job neither are they satisfied, nor they have a high income. While some advocate continuing work in such situations, others dismiss them as completely idle precious time. Both sides of the argument present rational ideas, which will be elaborated.
To begin with, proponents of work in bad situations assert that the benefits accruing from it are by no means negligible. A good illustration of this is the scientist who works voluntarily for several years, not only do they work for long hours without attaining a salary, but also their abilities are underestimated, in addition to behaving in impolite ways with them. Indeed, they tolerate these unfriendly workplaces for the sake of obtaining several things, some of which are being skillful, willpower, problem-solving, and data analysis. The more marketable skills they have, the more they are likely to be experts. As a result, they can find better positions in well-known organizations.
On the contrary, opponents put forward the argument that working in bad conditions causes some deleterious effects on individuals, hence, job seekers should be aware when it comes to selecting a workplace. The most compelling reason justifying their assertion is that the time and energy expended on working in harsh workplaces can be put to better use in a healthy environment that helps them to foster their aptitude as well as manifest their ulterior talent resulting in having a sense of achievement.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that we ought to consider some criteria such as the behavior of the boss, and colleagues, and ambiance when applying for a job, since it can have both deleterious and positive impacts on our social life leading to either obtaining unprecedented success or failed.