Question: Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular ...

Marking Generated by Free AI Models

You are on the free tier, which uses free AI models. They can occasionally be slow, unstable, or temporarily unavailable. Balang Plus uses premium models for faster, more reliable, and higher-quality marking.

Click on red question marks (?) to see an explanation for each change. Some changes are only suggestions and don't mean the original is necessarily wrong.
One of the important arguments among environmentalismenvironmentalists is worring for lossingworrying about the loss of particular species of plants and animals at this time. Althogh,Although it is one of the greatest aspects of environmental problems, in my opinion some other issuseissues are as mainsignificant as lossing especial especieslosing specific species. From an overall perspective, the growth ofin the number of people, causes the over usage overuse of environmental soursesresources, while hunting and cultivating some kinds of species certain species have increased drastically recently. Indeed, the environment not to be able is unable to foster again rapidllyrecover rapidly. UltimatellyUltimately, the balance between consumingconsumption and applyingrenewal is damaged. AdditionalyAdditionally, some unique kindkinds of animals were hunted, it is because collectors pay extra money for them. For instance, Hindian tigger hase been extincted, resulting in hunting for the Indian tiger has gone extinct due to years and enhancedof hunting, which increased local people's incomes. However, itwhile this is a popular idea these daydays, in my opinion, over-pollution polluted is simultaneously realy dangeriousvery dangerous for plants and animals at this time. Litter are expandedis scattered in the suburbs and forestforests, and smog offrom factories and cars is emissionedemitted due to burnburning coal in developing countries. Not only do we use the consume vast amounts of vegetables and meet ofmeat from animals, but we also desrtoyeddestroy their habitats. Furthermore, Peoplepeople should be much more concernconcerned about the side-effect effects of their treatsactions. For example, after rised air pollution rose in tehranTehran, 80% of local birds are migrated and never returnd returned. In conclusion, my firm belifbelief is, that while the loss of particular species of plants and animals is an important topic at this time, overpllutionover-pollution and over consumption is overconsumption are as important as other topicsissues and aslo intense lossingalso contribute to the diverceintense loss of species diversity in the world.
See more samples for this topic
Check your essay for this topic
Overall Band Score
4
Overview
Vocabulary Range
average
Linking Words
weak
Spelling
weak
Grammar Accuracy
weak
Grammar Range
average
Cohesion
average
Paragraph Structure
average
Task Response
average
Word Count
sufficient
While we are confident in our score estimation, you are not guaranteed to receive the same score in an official test.

Feedback on Your Essay

Task Achievement

  • Your essay addresses both views and provides your opinion, which meets the task requirements. However, the argument could be clearer and more developed.
  • Some points are not fully explained (e.g., "over usage of environmental sourses" needs more detail).
  • Examples (e.g., Indian tiger, Tehran’s pollution) are relevant but could be more precise (e.g., "Hindian tigger" should be "Indian tiger," and "tehran" should be "Tehran").
  • The conclusion restates your opinion but could summarize the discussion more effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion

  • The essay has a logical structure (introduction, body paragraphs, conclusion), but some ideas are not smoothly connected.
  • Transition words ("However," "Furthermore," "For instance") are used, but some sentences are awkwardly phrased, making the flow less natural.
  • Paragraphing is mostly correct, but some sentences could be combined for better clarity (e.g., "Additionaly, some unique kind of animals were hunted, it is because collectors pay extra money for them" could be reworded for smoother flow).

Lexical Resource

  • There are several spelling and word choice errors (e.g., "lossing" → "losing," "especial especies" → "specific species," "overpllution" → "over-pollution").
  • Some vocabulary is repetitive (e.g., "this time" is overused; alternatives like "currently" or "today" could be used).
  • A few awkward phrases ("environment not to be able to foster again rapidlly" → "the environment cannot recover quickly").

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

  • There are frequent grammatical errors:
    • Subject-verb agreement ("the growth of number of people, causes" → "the growth in the number of people causes").
    • Incorrect verb forms ("hase been extincted" → "has gone extinct").
    • Missing articles ("in developing countries" is correct, but "burn coal" should be "burning coal").
    • Sentence fragments ("Indeed, environment not to be able to foster again rapidlly" is incomplete).
  • More complex sentence structures (e.g., conditional or passive voice) could improve variety.

Suggestions for Improvement

  1. Proofread for grammar and spelling – Use tools like Grammarly or ask a native speaker to check.
  2. Clarify and expand ideas – Some arguments need more explanation (e.g., how overconsumption affects species loss).
  3. Improve transitions – Ensure each sentence flows logically into the next.
  4. Use more precise vocabulary – Avoid repetition and choose accurate terms (e.g., "biodiversity loss" instead of "lossing the diverce of species").

With more attention to grammar, word choice, and coherence, your essay will be stronger. Keep practicing!