Question: The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and dri...
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The given charts show an assessment in five cities in Australia that examines people's preferences in purchasing coffee or tea. Overall, it is evident that all categories have fluctuant patterns with the proportion of a habit visiting a cafe having the largest average compared to others.
The number of populations that purchase coffee or tea from a cafe is generally higher with more than 60% both in Melbourne and Hobart, which holds the greatest percentage in all categories. However, Adelaide is slightly less than 50%, indicating a moderate difference in that particular category and positioning it as the least preferably habit. Additionally, the second place is Sydney with marginally above 60%, which only creates a subtle gap.
Furthermore, residents who consumed instant coffee in the last 4 weeks are mainly in Hobart, which is nearly 55%, while Sydney is the lowest population with only around 45%. In contrast, people who bought fresh coffee largely come from Sydney with approximately 40%, even though it is the highest percentage among all categories, it is still smaller rather than other aspects.
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The given charts show an assessment in five cities in Australia that examines people's preferences in purchasing coffee or tea. Overall, it is evident that all categories have fluctuant patterns with the proportion of a habit visiting a cafe having the largest average compared to others.
The number of populations that purchase coffee or tea from a cafe is generally higher with more than 60% both in Melbourne and Hobart, which holds the greatest percentage in all categories. However, Adelaide is slightly less than 50%, indicating a moderate difference in that particular category and positioning it as the least preferably habit. Additionally, the second place is Sydney with marginally above 60%, which only creates a subtle gap.
Furthermore, residents who consumed instant coffee in the last 4 weeks are mainly in Hobart, which is nearly 55%, while Sydney is the lowest population with only around 45%. In contrast, people who bought fresh coffee largely come from Sydney with approximately 40%, even though it is the highest percentage among all categories, it is still smaller rather than other aspects.