Question: In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to re...
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It is sometimes argued that in the far future newspapers and books will disappear. Due to advancements in technology, news and books will be published online and with nowithout the need for payment, so they will be more accessible to people. While I agree that books and newspapers would be significantly affected in the future, I believe that there are individuals who will continue to buy paper books or newspapers, and even pay for them.On the one hand, the effects of technological developments are undeniable, particularly on books and newspapers. First of all, with a considerable range of platforms in the worldworldwide, there is competition between local and national press to attract their customers, so the newestlatest news will be published quickly and will be available and free on many platforms, even on social media, like Instagram. In addition, as more people become aware of the detrimental effecteffects of printing paper, which causes deforestation, they are less willing to buy these and prefer more e-books or readreading news online. Therefore, these traditional waysmethods will lose their attractionappeal.On the other hand, despite the above arguments, I believe that some people are goingwill continue to use paper-based news or books in the future. By increasing the speed of publishing news, there are potential disadvantages. Firstly, the quality of news willmay decrease; and secondly, the yellow press might publish false news to increase their income. As a result, individuals will buy newsnewspapers to ensure that the publisher does not make any mistakes for its profit. Moreover, there are a number of people who struggle with the physical conditions, medical problems, or not being familiar unfamiliaritywith technology, so they will buy paper books or newsnewspapers. For example, the older generation or disabled people who are not being able unableto go out will have to buy books, or people who have eye problems would continue to use traditional methods.In conclusion, in the wake of technology, paper books and newspapernewspapers may be forgotten, because in the future everything will be free and available. Although I agree that technology has a vital impact on books and newspapers, in my opinion, in the future some people, such as the elderly, will still buy newsnewspapers or prefer to read paper books.
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Task Achievement
Strengths:
Your essay presents a clear position (partial agreement) and develops arguments for both sides of the issue.
You provide relevant examples (e.g., environmental concerns, older generations, disabled individuals) to support your points.
The response exceeds the minimum word count, ensuring a thorough discussion.
Areas for Improvement:
The introduction could be more concise. The first sentence is somewhat repetitive ("in the far future newspapers and books will disappear" vs. "nobody will buy printed newspapers or books").
Some points could be more developed. For example, the argument about "yellow press" publishing false news is interesting but could be expanded with a clearer link to why printed news would be more reliable.
The conclusion restates the thesis but could summarize the key arguments more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Strengths:
The essay is logically structured with clear paragraphs (introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion).
Transition words ("On the one hand," "On the other hand," "In conclusion") help guide the reader.
Areas for Improvement:
Some sentences could be more smoothly connected. For example, the shift from discussing environmental concerns to competition in news platforms feels abrupt.
The phrase "By increasing the speed of publishing news, there are potential disadvantages" is unclear—consider rewording for better flow.
Lexical Resource
Strengths:
You use a good range of vocabulary (e.g., "detrimental effect," "deforestation," "yellow press").
There are no major errors in word choice, and the language is mostly natural.
Areas for Improvement:
Some phrases could be more precise. For example, "physical conditions, medical problems or not being familiar with technology" could be reworded for clarity (e.g., "physical disabilities, medical conditions, or limited technological literacy").
Avoid redundancy: "paper books or newspapers" could simply be "printed materials" in some places.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Strengths:
The essay demonstrates a variety of sentence structures (simple, compound, and complex).
Most grammar is accurate, and errors do not impede understanding.
Areas for Improvement:
Some minor grammatical issues:
"there is competition between local and national press to attract their customers" → "there is competition among local and national press outlets to attract readers."
"people who have eye problems would continue to use traditional methods" → "people with eye problems may prefer traditional methods."
Watch for subject-verb agreement: "the older generation or disabled people who are not being able to go out" → "older adults or disabled individuals who cannot go out."
Final Suggestions
Refine the introduction to be more concise and engaging.
Strengthen transitions between ideas for smoother flow.
Expand on key arguments (e.g., reliability of printed news) with more detail.
Proofread for minor grammatical and lexical improvements.
Overall, this is a well-structured and thoughtful response. With some refinements in clarity and precision, it could be even stronger. Keep practicing!