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Question: In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to re...

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It is sometimes argued that in the far-future newspapers and books would be disappeareddisappear. Due to the advancements in technology, news and books will be published online and eventhere will be no need for payment, so they will be more accessible forto people. While I agree that books and newspapers would be significantly affected significant in the future, however I believe that there are individuals who will continue to buy paper books or newspapers, and even pay for them. On the one hand, the effects of thetechnological developments of technology are undeniable, particularly on books and newspapers. First of all, by having with a considerable range of platforms in the world, there is a competition between local and national press to attract their customers, so the newestlatest news will be published fastquickly and will be available and free on so many platforms, even on the social media, like Instagram. In addition, as more people bebecome aware about aof the detrimental effect of printing paper, which causecauses deforestation, they are not moreno longer willing to buy these and prefer more e-books or readreading news online. Therefore, these traditional waysmethods will lose their attractionappeal. On the other hand, despite ofthe above arguments, I believe that people are going to use paper-based news or books in the future. ByWith the increasing the speed of publishing news, there are potential disadvantages. Firstly, the quality of news will be decrease; and secondly, the yellow press might publish false news to increase their outcomeprofits. As a result, individuals will buy newsnewspapers to make sure ensure that the publisher dodoes not anymake mistakes for its profit. Moreover, there are a number of people thatwho struggle with the physical conditionconditions, medical problems, or are not being familiar with technology, so they will buy paper books or newsnewspapers. For example, the older generation or disabledisabled people who are not being able unable to go out will have to buy books, or people who having eyes problemhave eye problems would continue to use the traditional methods. In conclusion, Inin the wake of technology, paper books and newspaper maybenewspapers may be forgotten, because in the future everything will be free and available. Although I agree that technology has a vital impact on books and newspapernewspapers, in my opinion, in the future some people, such as the elderly, will still buy newsnewspapers or prefer to read paper bookbooks.
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It is sometimes argued that in the far-future newspapers and books would be disappeared. Due to the advancements in technology, news and books will be published online and even no need for payment, so they will be more accessible for people. While I agree that books and newspapers would be affected significant in the future, however I believe that there are individuals who will continue to buy paper books or newspapers, and even pay for them.
It is sometimes argued that in the distant future, newspapers and books will disappear. Due to technological advancements, news and books will be published online, often without payment, making them more accessible to people. While I agree that books and newspapers will be significantly affected in the future, I believe that some individuals will continue to buy and even pay for printed books and newspapers.
On the one hand, the effects of the developments of technology are undeniable, particularly on books and newspapers. First of all, by having a considerable range of platforms in the world, there is a competition between local and national press to attract their customers, so the newest news will be published fast and will be available and free on so many platforms, even on the social media, like Instagram. In addition, as more people be aware about a detrimental effect of printing paper which cause deforestation, they are not more willing to buy these and prefer more e-books or read news online. Therefore, these traditional ways will lose their attraction.
On the one hand, the impact of technological developments is undeniable, particularly on books and newspapers. Firstly, with the vast number of digital platforms available, there is intense competition among local and national media outlets to attract readers. As a result, the latest news is published quickly and made freely accessible on numerous platforms, including social media like Instagram. Additionally, as more people become aware of the harmful environmental effects of paper production, such as deforestation, they are less willing to purchase printed materials and instead prefer e-books or online news. Consequently, traditional formats may lose their appeal.
On the other hand, despite of above arguments, I believe that people are going to use paper-based news or books in future. By increasing the speed of publishing news, there are potential disadvantages. Firstly, the quality of news will be decrease; and secondly, the yellow press might publish false news to increase their outcome. As result, individuals will buy news to make sure that the publisher do not any mistakes for its profit. Moreover, there are a number of people that struggle with the physical condition, medical problems or not being familiar with technology, so they will buy paper books or news. For example, the older generation or disable people who are not being able to go out will have to buy books, or people who having eyes problem would continue to use the traditional methods.
On the other hand, despite these arguments, I believe that some people will continue to use paper-based news and books in the future. The rapid speed of online news publication has potential drawbacks. Firstly, the quality of news may decline, and secondly, sensationalist media might spread false information to increase engagement. As a result, some individuals may prefer purchasing printed newspapers to ensure reliability and accuracy. Furthermore, certain groups, such as the elderly or those with medical conditions, may struggle with digital technology and thus continue to rely on physical books and newspapers. For example, older generations or people with disabilities who find it difficult to go out may still purchase books, while those with vision problems may prefer traditional reading methods.
In conclusion, In the wake of technology, paper books and newspaper maybe be forgotten, because in the future everything will be free and available. Although I agree that technology has a vital impact on books and newspaper, in my opinion in the future some people, such as the elderly, still buy news or prefer to read paper book.
In conclusion, while technological progress may reduce the prevalence of printed books and newspapers in the future, I believe that some individuals, particularly older generations and those with specific needs, will continue to use them. Despite the convenience of digital media, printed materials will likely retain a place in society.
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Overview
Vocabulary Range
average
Linking Words
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Spelling
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Grammar Accuracy
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Grammar Range
average
Cohesion
average
Paragraph Structure
average
Task Response
strong
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Task Achievement

  • Strengths:

    • You present a clear position (partial agreement) and develop arguments for both sides.
    • The essay is well-structured with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
    • You provide relevant examples (e.g., older generations, people with medical conditions) to support your points.

  • Areas for Improvement:

    • Some arguments lack depth. For example, the claim that "the quality of news will decrease" could be expanded with more reasoning or evidence.
    • The conclusion could be more concise and directly restate your position without repeating too much from the body.
    • A few points are unclear or awkwardly phrased (e.g., "the publisher do not any mistakes for its profit").

Coherence and Cohesion

  • Strengths:

    • The essay follows a logical structure, with clear topic sentences in each paragraph.
    • Transition words (e.g., "On the one hand," "On the other hand," "In conclusion") help guide the reader.

  • Areas for Improvement:

    • Some sentences are overly long or complex, making them harder to follow (e.g., "By increasing the speed of publishing news, there are potential disadvantages").
    • Minor grammatical errors affect clarity (e.g., "there are individuals who will continue to buy paper books or newspapers, and even pay for them" – "even pay" is redundant).
    • The phrase "In the wake of technology" is not used correctly—it should be "With the advancement of technology."

Lexical Resource

  • Strengths:

    • You use a range of vocabulary (e.g., "detrimental effect," "yellow press," "traditional methods").
    • Some good collocations (e.g., "considerable range of platforms," "potential disadvantages").

  • Areas for Improvement:

    • Some word choices are unnatural or incorrect (e.g., "newspapers would be disappeared" → "newspapers will disappear").
    • Repetition of words like "news" and "books" could be reduced with synonyms (e.g., "publications," "print media").
    • Some phrases are awkward (e.g., "people be aware about" → "people become aware of").

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

  • Strengths:

    • You attempt complex sentence structures (e.g., conditionals, relative clauses).
    • Generally, verb tenses are used correctly.

  • Areas for Improvement:

    • Several grammatical errors affect clarity:
      • "newspapers would be disappeared" → "newspapers will disappear"
      • "the quality of news will be decrease" → "the quality of news will decrease"
      • "individuals will buy news to make sure that the publisher do not any mistakes" → "individuals will buy newspapers to ensure publishers do not make mistakes"
    • Subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., "there are a number of people that struggle" → "there are a number of people who struggle").

Final Suggestions

  • Revise awkward phrasing to improve clarity and fluency.
  • Expand on key arguments (e.g., why false news is more likely online).
  • Proofread carefully to correct grammatical errors.
  • Use synonyms to avoid repetition.

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