Question: In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to re...
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It is sometimes argued that in the far-future newspapers and books would be disappeareddisappear. Due to the advancements in technology, news and books will be published online and eventhere will be no need for payment, so they will be more accessible forto people. While I agree that books and newspapers would be significantly affected significant in the future, however I believe that there are individuals who will continue to buy paper books or newspapers, and even pay for them.
On the one hand, the effects of thetechnological developments of technology are undeniable, particularly on books and newspapers. First of all, by having witha considerable range of platforms in the world, there is a competition between local and national press to attract their customers, so the newestlatest news will be published fastquickly and will be available and free on so many platforms, even on the social media, like Instagram. In addition, as more people bebecome aware about aof the detrimental effect of printing paper, which causecauses deforestation, they are not moreno longer willing to buy these and prefer more e-books or readreading news online. Therefore, these traditional waysmethods will lose their attractionappeal.
On the other hand, despite ofthe above arguments, I believe that people are going to use paper-based news or books in the future. ByWith the increasing the speed of publishing news, there are potential disadvantages. Firstly, the quality of news will be decrease; and secondly, the yellow press might publish false news to increase their outcomeprofits. As a result, individuals will buy newsnewspapers to make sure ensurethat the publisher dodoes not anymake mistakes for its profit. Moreover, there are a number of people thatwho struggle with the physical conditionconditions, medical problems, or are not being familiar with technology, so they will buy paper books or newsnewspapers. For example, the older generation or disabledisabled people who are not being able unableto go out will have to buy books, or people who having eyes problemhave eye problems would continue to use the traditional methods.
In conclusion, Inin the wake of technology, paper books and newspaper maybenewspapers may be forgotten, because in the future everything will be free and available. Although I agree that technology has a vital impact on books and newspapernewspapers, in my opinion, in the future some people, such as the elderly, will still buy newsnewspapers or prefer to read paper bookbooks.
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Task Achievement
Strengths:
You present a clear position (partial agreement) and develop arguments for both sides.
The essay is well-structured with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
You provide relevant examples (e.g., older generations, people with medical conditions) to support your points.
Areas for Improvement:
Some arguments lack depth. For example, the claim that "the quality of news will decrease" could be expanded with more reasoning or evidence.
The conclusion could be more concise and directly restate your position without repeating too much from the body.
A few points are unclear or awkwardly phrased (e.g., "the publisher do not any mistakes for its profit").
Coherence and Cohesion
Strengths:
The essay follows a logical structure, with clear topic sentences in each paragraph.
Transition words (e.g., "On the one hand," "On the other hand," "In conclusion") help guide the reader.
Areas for Improvement:
Some sentences are overly long or complex, making them harder to follow (e.g., "By increasing the speed of publishing news, there are potential disadvantages").
Minor grammatical errors affect clarity (e.g., "there are individuals who will continue to buy paper books or newspapers, and even pay for them" – "even pay" is redundant).
The phrase "In the wake of technology" is not used correctly—it should be "With the advancement of technology."
Lexical Resource
Strengths:
You use a range of vocabulary (e.g., "detrimental effect," "yellow press," "traditional methods").
Some good collocations (e.g., "considerable range of platforms," "potential disadvantages").
Areas for Improvement:
Some word choices are unnatural or incorrect (e.g., "newspapers would be disappeared" → "newspapers will disappear").
Repetition of words like "news" and "books" could be reduced with synonyms (e.g., "publications," "print media").
Some phrases are awkward (e.g., "people be aware about" → "people become aware of").
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Strengths:
You attempt complex sentence structures (e.g., conditionals, relative clauses).
Generally, verb tenses are used correctly.
Areas for Improvement:
Several grammatical errors affect clarity:
"newspapers would be disappeared" → "newspapers will disappear"
"the quality of news will be decrease" → "the quality of news will decrease"
"individuals will buy news to make sure that the publisher do not any mistakes" → "individuals will buy newspapers to ensure publishers do not make mistakes"
Subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., "there are a number of people that struggle" → "there are a number of people who struggle").
Final Suggestions
Revise awkward phrasing to improve clarity and fluency.
Expand on key arguments (e.g., why false news is more likely online).
Proofread carefully to correct grammatical errors.
Use synonyms to avoid repetition.
Overall, your essay is well-organized and addresses the prompt effectively, but refining grammar and expression would strengthen it further. Keep practicing!