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These days, due to changes in humankind’s way of life, the Earth is facing some serious environmental problems. While some believe that the main environmental problem is the loss of particular species of plants and animals, I agree with those who feel that there are more important environmental problems.
On the one hand, the loss of particular species of plants and animals is said to be the main environmental problem of our time. Firstly, it could be argued that this may affect ecosystems. For example, the water purification process directly connected to some marine creatures would be disturbed. Similarly, our climate regulation that follows from a specific plant may be affected. Moreover, some people believe that medical resources might be affected by the loss of these species, and agricultural diversity would be decreased to a limited number. In other words, a specific type of plant that used to be used in producing a medicine will not be available.
On the other hand, I firmly believe that there are more important environmental problems. Firstly, I would argue that one important issue is resource depletion; overuse of water and soil degradation are two examples. How do these problems threaten sustainability and human survival? The next problem is pollution. Personally, I believe that plastic and water pollution are some of the far-reaching problems that humans face. Water pollution makes marine creatures poisoned, and this may affect the food chain. Consequently, this process causes damage to our health. Finally, and most importantly, is climate change. It directly affects all aspects of life and the Earth. For example, crop shortages, extreme weather, and rising sea levels are the most significant impacts of climate change.
All of this being said, although the loss of particular plants and animals may affect ecosystems, there are many more important problems that should be considered. Therefore, on balance, I believe that climate change is the issue we should focus on.