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Question: Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. O...

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Nowadays, big companies and even small producers pay special attention to advertisements for their products. there are some discussions about the influences of advertisement on people. many people think advertising is not as efficient as past. while others believe that advertising can persuade people to buy things. I totally agree with the second opinion for some reasons that will be discussed in this essay. To begin with, one of the most important measures that every company has to take is introducing their products to people. So, the first reason for the importance of advertising is a necessary need to introduce people new stuff. If people do not know anything about what a company produces, then it will be predictable for the company to go bankrupt. Moreover, the second reason that plays a key role in marketing is competition among companies. as everyone knows, each producer has to make creative advertisements for itself. Nowadays, there is a link between how a company introduces itself to people and the profit it makes in the market. For instance, there is a huge competition among drinking companies throughout Canada to persuade individuals to choose them and they try to convince people that they are the best. As another example, car manufacturers made a huge profit from advertising in the last decade. In conclusion, advertising is one of the most essential factors that may help sellers to introduce their products even today, as well as in the past. The essential need to make people aware of new staff in the market and stay in the competitive atmosphere of the market are the two main reasons that support this assumption.
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Nowadays, big companies and even small producers pay special attention to advertisements for their products. there are some discussions about the influences of advertisement on people. many people think advertising is not as efficient as past. while others believe that advertising can persuade people to buy things. I totally agree with the second opinion for some reasons that will be discussed in this essay. To begin with, one of the most important measures that every company has to take is introducing their products to people. So, the first reason for the importance of advertising is a necessary need to introduce people new stuff. If people do not know anything about what a company produces, then it will be predictable for the company to go bankrupt. Moreover, the second reason that plays a key role in marketing is competition among companies. as everyone knows, each producer has to make creative advertisements for itself. Nowadays, there is a link between how a company introduces itself to people and the profit it makes in the market. For instance, there is a huge competition among drinking companies throughout Canada to persuade individuals to choose them and they try to convince people that they are the best. As another example, car manufacturers made a huge profit from advertising in the last decade. In conclusion, advertising is one of the most essential factors that may help sellers to introduce their products even today, as well as in the past. The essential need to make people aware of new staff in the market and stay in the competitive atmosphere of the market are the two main reasons that support this assumption.
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