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There is no denying the fact that the pollution caused by commercial airplanes is affecting onthe environment. While it is a commonly held belief that the reducing the number of flights helphelps protect the environment, there is also an argument that opposes this idea. This essay will analyse this topic from both pointpoints of viewsview and express my opinion. On one hand, when people stop flayingflying or even reduce the number of times they fly every year, it will increase the chance of reducing the pollution, this. This step will force the commercial airlines to figurefind solutions to avoid financial losses caused by people’s decisiondecisions. For example, when one company risesraises the price of its product, most of people will take the step asof boycotting it, and this will make the company to reduce the price again. On the other hand, reducing the number of flights will affect on the economy. It is possible to say that most of sectors depend on travelingtravel, such as tourism, services, etc. InFor instance, Jordan is a historical country and its economy depends heavily on tourism,; when people stop flying, this will cause significant losses in the economy. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to this question. On balance, however, I tend to believe that the environment is not a private property and it is a matter for all people in the whole world,; we should do our best to protect and preserve it.

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Overall Band Score

5

Overview

Vocabulary Range

average

Linking Words

average

Spelling

average

Grammar Accuracy

weak

Grammar Range

average

Cohesion

average

Paragraph Structure

average

Task Response

average

Word Count

insufficient

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Task Response: You address both sides and give a clear opinion, but the essay is underlength (234 words), which will incur a penalty. Ideas need more development; for example, the airline boycott analogy is confusing and the Jordan example lacks specific detail on how the economy suffers.

Coherence & Cohesion: The structure is logical (intro, body paragraphs, conclusion), but linking devices are mechanical ("On one hand," "For example," "In conclusion"). Paragraphing is adequate, but the flow within paragraphs is disrupted by awkward phrasing.

Lexical Resource: Vocabulary is sufficient for the task but repetitive ("reduce the number of flights," "environment," "economy"). There are errors in word formation and collocation: "affecting on environment" (affect the environment), "flaying" (flying), "rises the price" (raises), "In instance" (For instance), "private property" (possession).

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: You attempt complex sentences, but frequent errors reduce clarity. Key issues: subject-verb agreement ("reducing... will increase"), article usage ("the reducing," "the environment"), gerund/infinitive confusion ("make the company to reduce," "depend on traveling"), and sentence fragments/run-ons in the conclusion.

Key Advice: Aim for 270+ words. Extend arguments with specific explanations rather than analogies. Review verb patterns (affect vs affect on, make + object + bare infinitive) and article usage. Proofread for spelling ("flaying").