Question: Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory j...
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While it could be argued that we should try to change our bad situations such as economic and career problems, there is a viewpoint against this statement that says the best way is to tolerate such situations. In my opinion, though sometimes it is hard to move towards great opportunities, we should do our best to change such situations.
On the one hand, some suppose that trying to change everything that might sound bad in your view will lead to unpleasant results. For example, an employee working with a low salary but in a stable situation is willing to resign from the current work to start his own business without considering unexpected circumstances and experiences. It is more likely that this person will lose the least money each month because it sounds illogical to become successful in running a private business.
On the other hand, some argue that the world gives us this chance to live once. Consequently, it is logical to fight to get whatever we are willing. For example, it is significantly important when a patient is fighting against a severe illness such as cancer. Staying in such a situation and not following the cure protocol will result in death which is against human beings' nature. I also support the idea that humans are risky creatures. In other words, it is a part of the survival process as it could be seen that taking risks has been an inseparable part of evolution.
In conclusion, there are two viewpoints on whether we should tolerate terrible conditions or should try to improve unwanted situations such as jobs, and insufficient salary.
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While it could be argued that we should try to change our bad situations such as economic and career problems, there is a viewpoint against this statement that says the best way is to tolerate such situations. In my opinion, though sometimes it is hard to move towards great opportunities, we should do our best to change such situations.
On the one hand, some suppose that trying to change everything that might sound bad in your view will lead to unpleasant results. For example, an employee working with a low salary but in a stable situation is willing to resign from the current work to start his own business without considering unexpected circumstances and experiences. It is more likely that this person will lose the least money each month because it sounds illogical to become successful in running a private business.
On the other hand, some argue that the world gives us this chance to live once. Consequently, it is logical to fight to get whatever we are willing. For example, it is significantly important when a patient is fighting against a severe illness such as cancer. Staying in such a situation and not following the cure protocol will result in death which is against human beings' nature. I also support the idea that humans are risky creatures. In other words, it is a part of the survival process as it could be seen that taking risks has been an inseparable part of evolution.
In conclusion, there are two viewpoints on whether we should tolerate terrible conditions or should try to improve unwanted situations such as jobs, and insufficient salary.