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There is a debate between the people who state that it is better to accept bad circumstances, including career or economic difficulties and individuals who assert that they should make a lot of effort in order to combat these challenges. I support the second view since it is possible for people to alter conditions as they gain experience to deal with challenges.
People who think that it is better to accept a difficult situation claim that if they deal with challenges, their moods are irritated negatively, and will not be able to focus on their other goals in their lives, so they avoid facing them. These people worry that they may lack capabilities to fight their challenges, so they prefer to avoid them. They state that when they escape from their problems, including financial hardshape or not having a stimulating job, their minds are clear for planning other tasks. For instance, Professor Hesabi, who was a young Iranian child facing complicated financial issues, cleared his mind of not having sufficient money. Although he encountered economic challenges in his life, he could concentrate on his educational aspects of his lives by forgetting his financial problems, so he could create a bright future for himself. Consequently, he could have the potential of moving up the educational ladder and became one of the greatest figures in the history of Iran. However, if he had engaged himself in thinking about his financial issues, he would have been bombarded by negative anxiety, which might have been disappointed him considerably. Therefore, it is possible that when people elude their challenges, they will have the potential of concentrating on their other targets.
Nevertheless, other people assert that if they embrace their challenges and combat them, they will be able to resolve their problems since all the problems can be addressed efficiently. When people encounter a challenge, they should not elude it since if individuals accept it, they can become more mature. When they have gained a great deal of experience, they will be able to solve their issues effectively. In fact, the more mature they are, they more chances they will have to resolve their issues. For example, Oliver Twist, who suffered from extreme economic hardshape, had no choice but to work from dawn to dusk. However, he did not become disappointed, and tried to work more, so he could transform his life into a better life and could enhance it. As a consequence, if he had given up, he would not have been able to change his career. Thus, people should embrace challenges and do their best to address their difficult parts of their lives.
In conclusion, whereas some people believe that is it better to accept a complicated situation, others state that they should deal with challenges in order to ameliorate those conditions. I agree with the second group because if people encounter issues, they become more mature, so they can alleviate their hard situations.