Question: Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory j...
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There is a belief that not complaining about an unpleasant occasion while accepting it, is the best work to do. No matter it is a not rewarding job or lack of money situation. However, some people claim that some measures should be taken to eliminate unsatisfactorily elements in order to provide better situation. I would argue that it is much better to do not give up and try to get over these situations.
One the one hand, the belief of that it is better to not caring about bad events in our lives is because of our inability to change some situations. To put it simply, it is assumed that if a person is under somebody's thumb, they are less likely to have the confidence to show their unsatisfaction. Especially, it is a common problem among employees which do their job unwillingly, additionally, not have been paid for month. Thus, they may be fed with despair and inferiority, while a strong attitude has been instilled into them which nothing is going to change, even if they strike.
On the other hand, there are some people who believe that a person should never lose they hope, irrespective of what the situation is, whether it is a boring job or the financial problems. There is always a chance to improve your situation, if you try. Moreover, it can not only contribute to a better quality in life but also personal development. To put it in another way, some qualifications cannot be achieved unless people learn to how defend their rights and be confident enough to take the step in order to enhance their situations. For instance, if a person be convinced to its current bad living condition, they are more likely to never progress and enjoy higher standard of living.
In conclusion, although some people may think doing nothing while facing a sever situation is the best option, I affirm behavioral and living improvement can happen only after people's efforts.
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There is a belief that not complaining about an unpleasant occasion while accepting it, is the best work to do. No matter it is a not rewarding job or lack of money situation. However, some people claim that some measures should be taken to eliminate unsatisfactorily elements in order to provide better situation. I would argue that it is much better to do not give up and try to get over these situations.
One the one hand, the belief of that it is better to not caring about bad events in our lives is because of our inability to change some situations. To put it simply, it is assumed that if a person is under somebody's thumb, they are less likely to have the confidence to show their unsatisfaction. Especially, it is a common problem among employees which do their job unwillingly, additionally, not have been paid for month. Thus, they may be fed with despair and inferiority, while a strong attitude has been instilled into them which nothing is going to change, even if they strike.
On the other hand, there are some people who believe that a person should never lose they hope, irrespective of what the situation is, whether it is a boring job or the financial problems. There is always a chance to improve your situation, if you try. Moreover, it can not only contribute to a better quality in life but also personal development. To put it in another way, some qualifications cannot be achieved unless people learn to how defend their rights and be confident enough to take the step in order to enhance their situations. For instance, if a person be convinced to its current bad living condition, they are more likely to never progress and enjoy higher standard of living.
In conclusion, although some people may think doing nothing while facing a sever situation is the best option, I affirm behavioral and living improvement can happen only after people's efforts.