Question: Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular ...
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In the present climate, ecological issues have become a matter of concern for many individuals.While some insist on the extinction of certain flora and fauna around the globe as the most vital matter today, others, including myself, claim that there are other pressing environmental obstacles to take into account.On one side of the argument, some maintain that with the loss of certain animals and various species of plants in different regions, the Earth's ecological balance might be hampered.They propose that loss of habitat due to the misguided policies and government's regulations worldwide contribute to animals and plant to go extinct, which should be considered as the main environmental issue. For instance, the number of Tigers in Iran is significantly dwindling due to the lack of preservation practices. Thus,it is implied that raising awareness and implementing policies to aviod mitigating the ecological effects, are of paramount importance.On the other hand, many state that some root problems , in particular climate change, are more inconsequential to point out. These challenges bring about a chain of other devestating issues and events, like pollution, droughts and floods , alterations in climate and ultimately loss of habitat and different species.By taking an active role in combating climate change, other challenges which are factor in , would also be resolved.Hence, a collective effort to reduce the climate change impacts is suggested.In the final analysis, although losing different plants and animals species is one of the most concerning issues in this day and age, resolving more fundemental obstacles in particular climate change is more feasible option.I find myself among those who concur with the latter belief.
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In the present climate, ecological issues have become a matter of concern for many individuals.While some insist on the extinction of certain flora and fauna around the globe as the most vital matter today, others, including myself, claim that there are other pressing environmental obstacles to take into account.On one side of the argument, some maintain that with the loss of certain animals and various species of plants in different regions, the Earth's ecological balance might be hampered.They propose that loss of habitat due to the misguided policies and government's regulations worldwide contribute to animals and plant to go extinct, which should be considered as the main environmental issue. For instance, the number of Tigers in Iran is significantly dwindling due to the lack of preservation practices. Thus,it is implied that raising awareness and implementing policies to aviod mitigating the ecological effects, are of paramount importance.On the other hand, many state that some root problems , in particular climate change, are more inconsequential to point out. These challenges bring about a chain of other devestating issues and events, like pollution, droughts and floods , alterations in climate and ultimately loss of habitat and different species.By taking an active role in combating climate change, other challenges which are factor in , would also be resolved.Hence, a collective effort to reduce the climate change impacts is suggested.In the final analysis, although losing different plants and animals species is one of the most concerning issues in this day and age, resolving more fundemental obstacles in particular climate change is more feasible option.I find myself among those who concur with the latter belief.